Some people believe that competitive sports, both team and individual, have no place in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
A common belief is held that competitive sports such as football or volleyball have no benefit for students. In my opinion, such games would certainly have certain drawbacks, however I believe it would help children grow much better both mentally and physically in the long term.
First and foremost, it seems that these kind of sports provide students opportunities to make friends with not only the teammates but also the opponents. In order words, it helps students develop the essential social skills and might as well the teamwork skills, which will be helpful in the future. For example, the bounding of class members would be tighten if they have to join effort so that they could win the other classes in a sport competition. In addition, these activities might teach student to work harder in order to achieve goals.
However, competitive sports are not flawless. Violence situations, which no one wants, might happen if certain team members become too aggressive during the match. This could lead to many other misdemeanors after the match. Thus, sportsmanship, one of the most important thing in sport and rarely mentioned at schools, should be taught thoroughly. In addition, distraction is another problem that parents are concerned with because it could draw children attention away from their academic studying. Nonetheless, this is also another great opportunities for kids, who are want to be a pro-player rather than a white collar worker, to recognize their dream.
In conclusion, it is true that allowing kids to play competitive games at school could have certain demerits, however I reckon that it could be outweighed by the merits of it if schools and parents give students enough attention.
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Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
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Suggestion: who is a are
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, nonetheless, so, thus, well, for example, i reckon, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1447.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18637992832 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72570688787 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620071684588 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 419.4 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6070061016 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.307692308 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4615384615 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8461538462 7.06120827912 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132741684456 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0481099319498 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0504748195275 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0849759227978 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.038635729402 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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