The following appeared in a letter to the editor of Parson City's local newspaper.
"In our region of Trillura, the majority of money spent on the schools that most students attend — the city-run public schools — comes from taxes that each city government collects. The region's cities differ, however, in the budgetary priority they give to public education. For example, both as a proportion of its overall tax revenues and in absolute terms, Parson City has recently spent almost twice as much per year as Blue City has for its public schools — even though both cities have about the same number of residents. Clearly, Parson City residents place a higher value on providing a good education in public schools than Blue City residents do."
In the letter to the editor of the Parson City's local newspaper, the conclusion is stated that the people living in the Parson city ensure a high value in providing good education in public schools than the Blue city residents. The author provides several reasons to base the conclusion that, firstly, Parson City has recently spent twice as much money per year as Blue City has for its public schools - even though both the cities have the same number of residents, secondly, most of the money spent on the city schools come from taxes that the government collects from each city. However, while the conclusion drawn by the author might hold water, it rests on several unfounded assumptions that, if not substantiated, might dramatically attenuate the persuasiveness of the argument. Therefore, a few questions must be answered.
First of all, are both cities comparable? In other words, do both the cities located in the same area, or do both the cities cites similar living standards? It might be possible, that both the cities are situated quite apart. While the Parson city might be located in a high-standard or posh area, the Blue city might be located in a bucolic place. If this is the case, then both the cities would differ in the quality of the people living in them. Thus, the people living in the Parson city would be of high class that could afford higher tax rates. However, the Blue city people could not. Further, if this scenario would have been cited by the author and could be represented systematically with proper pieces of evidence, then it would be plausible for the readers to believe it blindly.
Secondly, are the tax rates homogenous for both cities? The author suggests that both the cities have the same population, even though he asserts the reasons that the Parson city has spent twice as much money as the Blue city. If this is true, then the tax rates for both cities should have been the same. However, this assumption does not hold any solid grounds. Maybe, the tax rate for Parson city is double as compared to Blue city, due to which the Parson city accumulates a higher amount than Blue city. Therefore, the amount collected by the government is higher which further contributes to the public schools. The author overlooked the reason behind this and elicited that Parson city places a higher value.
Moreover, it could be possible that there are other sources of collecting revenue for the public schools. It could be possible that, as the Parson city is located in a high-class area, every individual must be extra careful in keeping the city clean. If the Parson city people are reckless and unscrupulous in terms of cleanliness, then they would be littering and causing vandalism for which they could be fined a higher price. Thus, this serves as an extra income from the government which could further contribute to the public schools. However, the author fails to evince this reason which makes the conclusion baseless.
A careful analysis presents the loopholes in the argument. The letter to the editor does not seem to be strong enough to buttress the conclusion of providing the Parson city residents a high place and undermining the value of the Blue city residents because all the reasons provided by the author are skeptical. Therefore, the author must rethink and provide a foolproof and logical solution.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 572 350
No. of Characters: 2722 1500
No. of Different Words: 218 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.89 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.759 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.404 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 192 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.185 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.611 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.704 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.32 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.483 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.116 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 119, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cities'' or 'city's'?
Suggestion: cities'; city's
...ocated in the same area, or do both the cities cites similar living standards? It migh...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, while, as for, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2799.0 2260.96107784 124% => OK
No of words: 572.0 441.139720559 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89335664336 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89045207381 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49965626625 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.393356643357 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 857.7 705.55239521 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.6211961787 57.8364921388 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.666666667 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1851851852 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2962962963 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.67664670659 321% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34196618753 0.218282227539 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106885596247 0.0743258471296 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100796215677 0.0701772020484 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219049145579 0.128457276422 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113096805154 0.0628817314937 180% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.3799401198 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 98.500998004 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 26.0 12.3882235529 210% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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