Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people think that the government should spend more money assisting artists, while others maintain that it should spend more money in support of athletes. For me, I think that it is better for the government to support athletes instead of artists. My reasons are as follows.
First, the government cares about money, and supporting athletes can help it save lots of money. Take my country as an example. As a result, my country only spend one million dollars assisting our national Olympic team. As a result, my government only spend less than thirty million dollars building the basketball stadium. However, my government might need to spend more than a billion dollars building museums or holding exhibitions for artists to show their work. Moreover, most of the instruments are quite expensive. Hence, the government might spend more than a hundred dollars buying instruments for musicians. In short, supporting athletes can prevent the government from wasting too much money.
Secondly, the government cares about its reputation, and supporting artists can guarantee them a better image. For instance, most athletes in a country can be famous if they perform well in Olympics. Thus, if the government assists talented athletes and trains them properly. Then, if the athlete performs extremely well in international competitions, the country can gain world-wide fame. In other words, supporting athletic talented people can help the athletes as well as the government gain a better reputation. However, artists such as pop musicians or rappers are generally notorious for their misbehavior. In other words, if a country assists them, they might instead receives a bad reputation.
Finally, the government should cares about equality, and spending more money on athletes can make sure that everyone in the country are on the same footing. To be more specific, most athletes are born in economically disadvantaged families. As a result, if the government supports these athletes, then they can make sure that they have equal access to various resources. In other words, the government can make sure that everyone has the right to pursue their dream. However, most musicians are born in an affluent family. In other words, they already have enough wealth to support themselves. Consequently, supporting them does not improve a country's equality.
In conclusion, I maintain that the government should spend more money in support of the athletics instead of artists, because the government usually cares about money, fame, and equality.
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Message: Did you mean 'saves'?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, hence, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, while, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in short, such as, as a result, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 5.04856512141 337% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 22.412803532 152% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 5.01324503311 379% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2150.0 1373.03311258 157% => OK
No of words: 401.0 270.72406181 148% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36159600998 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.04702891845 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77749292525 2.5805825403 108% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 145.348785872 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.443890274314 0.540411800872 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 645.3 419.366225166 154% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 1.25165562914 719% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 13.0662251656 199% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.9086710679 49.2860985944 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.6923076923 110.228320801 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4230769231 21.698381199 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.80769230769 7.06452816374 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 4.33554083885 346% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292597581245 0.272083759551 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0921006457295 0.0996497079465 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0749611163019 0.0662205650399 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210374491779 0.162205337803 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0617375670134 0.0443174109184 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.3589403974 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 53.8541721854 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.51 12.2367328918 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.42419426049 89% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 63.6247240618 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.7273730684 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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