Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Music is not just sounds, it is also a remedy to heal our heart wounds and connect people around the world. Many music genres and songs are available and accessible throughout countries, which facilitates humans in many aspects. This is undeniable because there are a lot of songs symbolizing countries or with deep meanings that some people can find their sound mates or make new friends worldwide.
On the one hand, there are beautiful songs written by talented composers about the cultures of their countries. Thanks to the development of technology, those songs can be spread widely to international listeners and as a result, those songs with that country's cultures will probably be well-known. Some might be fascinated by those cultures and get to know people in that country. A recent study depicts that 60% of international groups of friends get to know each other thanks to those amazing songs.
On the other hand, some music that encodes meanings can really bring people together. For instance, some introverts or shy people, they are prone to struggle with saying out loud or expressing their feelings. It is even more severe with teenagers whose parents do not have time to spend with them because they may behave and act in a negative way. In this case, music with specific meanings seems to be a good tool that helps them to voice their opinion to parents or to people around them. The Glory magazine shows that the rate of teenagers committing suicide has decreased thanks to music that helps them with expressing their minds.
In conclusion, music is such an amazing thing that can bring people close together despite their ages or cultural identities. Because of those benefits, some cultural songs should also be kept and conserved and other meaningful songs should be produced.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 330, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, really, so, well, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1507.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00664451827 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5318709972 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541528239203 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.4794914251 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 107.642857143 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278652283722 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0989440051445 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684015180685 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163863355224 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0574835160468 0.056905535591 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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