The following appeared in the summary of a study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin a medicine used to treat headaches Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates for t

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The following appeared in the summary of a study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia.

"Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, for the past several decades, food-processing companies have also been adding salicylates to foods as preservatives. This rise in the commercial use of salicylates has been found to correlate with a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by participants in our twenty-year study. Recently, food-processing companies have found that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods. With this new use for salicylates, we can expect a continued steady decline in the number of headaches suffered by the average citizen of Mentia."

The study claims that increasing use of salicylates will decline the number of headaches suffered by the average citizen of Mentia. To support this idea the study presents several factors. That salicylates belong to the same chemical family as aspirin which is used to cure headaches. Also, he assumes that the increasing use of salicylates is responsible for the decline in the number of headaches suffered by people. However, due to lack of logical explanation and doubtful remarks the standpoint does not seem valid.

Firstly, the author claims that as salicylates is in the same chemical family of aspirin, it will also work as aspirin and reduce headache. Perhaps, this might not be the case. It can be entirely possible that it does not cure headache at all. Perhaps manufacturing companies are using another product which is helping to reduce headache. Without ruling out this possibility, the claim does not hold water.

Even if the foregoing assumption is true, the study unfairly assumes that the result of the twenty-year study is accurate. It can be entirely possible that the people who have participated in the experiment had taken proper medical treatment from doctors. Or the reasons that were responsible for their headache has been reduced by this long time. So without rulling out this possibilty the claim that the use of salicylates is responsible for the decrease in headaches. Again the number of participants is also responsible for the accuracy of a survey. The smaller the proportion, the less accurate the result. If salicyclates has helped the small portion of people, it is not warranted that it will help all the people at the same level.

Again if we assume that salicyclates, which has been used as a preservetive, has some effect for reducing headaches, it is not necessarily be true that using as a flavor additives for food. It can be entirely possible that the health benefits of the product may decrease while processing it as a flavor additive food. If this is the case then the claim does not hold water. It will again increase the number of headaches suffered by people.

In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is seriously flawed due to its reliance on some unwarranted assumptions. The argument can be evaluated properly if the study can substantiate all the assumptions stated below.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 319, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...rocessing it as a flavor additive food. If this is the case then the claim does no...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, then, while, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1960.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 389.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03856041131 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83159590733 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46529562982 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.5559677565 57.8364921388 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.2173913043 119.503703932 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9130434783 23.324526521 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.04347826087 5.70786347227 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252837061367 0.218282227539 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0739938522325 0.0743258471296 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0861800605866 0.0701772020484 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146451518611 0.128457276422 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101694001541 0.0628817314937 162% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.3799401198 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 389 350
No. of Characters: 1904 1500
No. of Different Words: 174 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.441 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.895 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.749 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.913 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.999 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.522 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.287 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.488 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.06 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5