Growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on healthcare system in an effort to deal with health issue involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lesson in the shool curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many people believe that including physical awareness in the school curriculum is the optimum solution to tackle hospital deprivation from treating overweight individuals. It is agreed as it mitigates other debilitating diseases and gives holistic views on physical health. (39)
Physical knowledge in the school curriculum prevents students from debilitating diseases caused by obesity. Simply put, learning about the impact of having obesity forces students to be more considerate towards daily calorie consumption, encouraging them to stay in shape. For instance, a study by Harvard in 2016 on 100 high schools in Massachuset that involves physical awareness in their PTE subject shows that 80% of the students have ideal body weight after paying attention to calorie consumption. This results in low diabetes levels and decreases children with diabetes patients at a local hospital by more than 50%.
A thorough physical health module is also the effect of learning a physical lesson through the school curriculum, as they will understand their physical activity impacts their body weight. This inspires students to build a balanced lifestyle to prevent themselves from experiencing obesity. According to a journal published by NCBI in 2019, more than 70% of students in Cleveland elementary school do weekly workouts after learning about physical health at school for two years. They understand that a sedentary lifestyle leads to obesity as very little calorie is burned during the day. This results in those who routinely do the workout twice a week having a balance fat percentage than those who do not.
To sum up, the overwhelming treatment of overweight people in the health care system can be tackled by cultivating physical knowledge in the school curriculum. This prevents students from getting other diseases from being obese and provides holistic views on physical well-being.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, well, for instance, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1607.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48464163823 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82620648019 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563139931741 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6263614367 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.615384615 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5384615385 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.30769230769 7.06120827912 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141255950662 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0526887787668 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.036230713073 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0960057059121 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0169506919364 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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