In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that this is the responsibility of governments to solve the problem. What extent do you agree or disagree?
Due to the development of living standards, the number of children who are obese has increased significantly these days. Some people insist that it is the authorities’ responsibility to alleviate. From my perspective, I strongly support this statement; however, I do believe that parental roles have played as important as governments, and so do schools. My agreement and the elaboration thereof will be substantiated below.
Honestly, the more modern the country is, the more unhealthy foods are consumed. First and foremost, employees have succumbed to the daunting workload that makes them busier and leaves them with no time to take care of their offspring. Thus, processed food is the ideal meal for them thanks to its convenience as well as its unaffordable price that gets children to be overweight after a long time of eating. For instance, the boy whose parents work from the break of dawn to midnight has a tendency to become fatter than the kids who do not, as his father will order any meals that contain unhealthy nutrients with high calories for him to take away. As a result, to avoid the kids becoming obese, both schools and parents had to better educate them on a basic healthy lifestyle and the consequences of being overweight, such as heart diseases, diabetes, etc. If home-cooked meals are used, the number of obese individuals at an early age will be reduced.
In terms of the government’s role in solving this problem, there are various solutions for kids to overcome. Imposing a heavy tax is one reasonable way to prevent children from being unhealthy. If the company can not afford the tax, fewer fast foods are produced and consumed as well. Moreover, the government should also provide their citizens with a range of outdoor activities and competitions to encourage them to be more active during the day instead of playing video games. Last but not least, the children ought to be balanced between studying and holidays. According to scientific research, if individuals feel unsatisfied in their lives, they intend to binge eat, which has a negative impact on a healthy diet.
In conclusion, reducing the rate of obesity among children is a responsibility of the governmental and local authorities. I believe that if the government takes more account of this issue, the kids will overcome and pick up the habits to have a balanced life.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, honestly, however, if, moreover, so, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 395.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00506329114 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8947615252 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 176.041082164 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59746835443 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9230940947 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.833333333 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9444444444 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11111111111 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170187793149 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0503298704913 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480477730168 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0999093844256 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0171523120783 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, honestly, however, if, moreover, so, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 395.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00506329114 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8947615252 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 176.041082164 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59746835443 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9230940947 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.833333333 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9444444444 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11111111111 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170187793149 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0503298704913 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480477730168 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0999093844256 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0171523120783 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.