In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that this is the responsibility of governments to solve the problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The public has been discussing whether the government needs to take on the significant increase of the number of young people who have poor health conditions, as a result obesity; I strongly believe that the government has a duty to solve that. In this essay, I will obviously demonstrate my own perspective on the matter.
Although this serious problem is not a consequence of only the country’s policy, they still need to have an obvious view to prevent it as soon as possible. The primary reason for this is the fact that the government concentrates excessively on developing the country's economy by allowing fast food corporations and companies to cooperate widely, especially in developing countries, while paying less attention to the health of younger generations. An illustration of this is that in 2020, Vietnam witnessed a significant rise in its profits from exports; nevertheless, economic development should lead to an increase in people's health, notably youthful individuals, but in reality we see a startling increase in the number of obese young children. As a result, this indifference has contributed to the growth of outwight children.
Furthermore, according to many people, the other aspect that has an impact on why the government has to handle the jump in fat children is that younger generations are a potential workforce for the country's future. In other words, the nation might be led by them in the next centuries; therefore, the government needs to have reasonable policies to protect the health and abilities of these people. If the nation’s authorities succeed in their responsibility by minimizing the figure for fat and sugar consumed by the young, the development of the country might be guaranteed partially.
On the whole, governments should come up with more practical approaches to protect the health of young people from obesity and unhealthiness. If they do their duty effectively, I strongly believe that the country will witness an unprecedented growth in the coming future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, while, as to, as a result, in other words, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1711.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28086419753 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12425421676 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555555555556 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.7892922332 49.4020404114 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.545454545 106.682146367 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.4545454545 20.7667163134 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2727272727 7.06120827912 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181103293235 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.068697807278 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0242428111103 0.0667982634062 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105513256965 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0167396982615 0.056905535591 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 13.0946893788 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 50.2224549098 84% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.94 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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