In today's complicated and fast-paced world, stress and anxiety have become a serious problem to cope with. Some people believe that being alone and loneliness can cure stresses and make them relax. I, personally, on the other hand, think that the best method to decrease stress and be relax is to spend time with others. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
First of all, communication and speaking with friends and also family members plays a vital role in reducing stress levels in humans. Scientists point out that human is a social animal requiring others to survive and live better. Also, recent researches done in a public university shows that when we talk with friends or everyone else, certain hormones are released in the body making us feel relaxed. For instance, when I failed one of my exams in first year of the university, I felt so bad that I wanted to be alone. But, I decided to chat with a friend about it. After talking together and telling jokes, I reached to this point that I can handle it next semester and there is no need to be ashamed or stressed out. Had not speaked with a close colleague, I would not have felt relaxed. This example illustrates how it is important to chat with an intimate person when you get into trouble to diminish stress.
Last but not least, entertainment makes us happy diminishing the difficulties and hustle and bustles of life. Specially, those entertainment involving counterparts are more effective when dealing with anxieties or stresses. Some scholars proved that when we go out with our joyful friends and spend time with them, special hormones help us feel relaxed by diminishing our body's stresses. My personal example is a good illustration of this concept. Three years ago, when I got bankrupt, I was so depressed feeling terrible. After one month, I made decision to hang out with my friends, see my favorite movies and do other activities to bring my moral back to its good state. This strategy turned out to be helpful and I managed to come back to good old days and also it made me come up with creative ideas to solve my financial problems. If I had not took some time to entertain, I could not have come up with ideas to find a practical solution to my fiscal problem.
To put it all in a nutshell, although some individuals may think the opposite way, I strongly am of opinion that being sociable is great solution to make us calm. Not only does communication with others aid us in so many ways, but also going out and taking some time with individuals lessens stress producing hormones in our body.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 121, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this entertainment' or 'those entertainments'?
Suggestion: this entertainment; those entertainments
... hustle and bustles of life. Specially, those entertainment involving counterparts are more effecti...
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Line 3, column 850, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'taken'.
Suggestion: taken
...lve my financial problems. If I had not took some time to entertain, I could not hav...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, as to, for instance, i feel, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2161.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66738660907 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60391692603 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570194384449 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 678.6 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.6282418248 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2272727273 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0454545455 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.13636363636 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177304644656 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0534182683993 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480411634733 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120547268322 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0547517438877 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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