New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?
Hightech is developing more and more in the whole world. With the advent of technology, it revolutionized the way offspring consume time to utilize technology gadgets. Despite some obvious drawbacks of this trend, I believe that these are outweighed by the benefits.
Firstly, without face-to-face communication or joining in some social activities the children will fall into social isolation it is not affect immediately but it will be in their later lives. Besides, play more video game is prone to entail many health problems such as eye strain, short-sightedness and obesity. Finally, some healthy sports and arts activities can disappear by virtue of devote time using technology. For example, people who playing games for more than 180 minutes a day or abuse technology too much in some things will reduce some sensory functions.
On the other hand, there are many ways to make friends from all over the world by using Facebook or Instagram, people do not have to go anywhere they just need a phone or some technology system networked. Secondly Technology gives the teachers and students the ability to really get into the subject that they are learning about by creating the amazing illustrations on smartboards, computers or projectors. Not only for education but also technology has facilitate the entertainment industry to take off. For example, video game technology has developed into a billions-of dollar-a-year industry and also contributes to a great life for humans.
In conclusion, while this trend exists some negative features, I would argue that technology brings more benefits than drawbacks.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 456, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'facilitated'.
Suggestion: facilitated
...y for education but also technology has facilitate the entertainment industry to take off....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, firstly, if, really, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1364.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.328125 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97478826715 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.65234375 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 437.4 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1632074117 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.666666667 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6666666667 7.06120827912 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152459927372 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0523840530339 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0404611197323 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0919867514303 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0324197285354 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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