The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society.Do you think the advatages outweigh the dsadvantages?
Social networking sites are developing at an unprecedented pace, threatening the interpersonal connections directly. While the convenience and financial gains of social network are undeniable, I firmly hold the view that this is an detrimental trend due to negative effects on human mental health and human safety.
On the one hand, the advent of social network paralleled changes in interactions and businesses. Firstly, as social networking sites depend mainly on Internet signal, distance and time zone are no longer the obstacle to human contacts, which is a huge advantage for those who live miles away from home. Moreover, exchanging information within organizations or between service providers and their clients has become much more straightforward and cost-effective as social media requires reasonable fees compared to conventional media. As a result, there has been a boom in e-commerce as social networking sites enable firms to reach millions of target customers within their budget.
However, numerous consequences in terms of human psychological well-being and cyber security render the replacement of direct contacts by virtual world harmful to the society.
Needless to say, cyber criminals can take advantage of the convenience of social network by connecting hundreds of victims spontaneously. Additionally, due to the nature of online interactions, people can never really know who are behind the screen, which later could place them at risk of being fooled as all the data and information given can be faked. Another threat that users of social networking sites might face is isolation and depression. In other words, since online relationships are often more fragile and insecure than face-to-face contact, mutual understanding and deeply connecting tend to not happen. Therefore, despite having hundreds of friends online, teenagers nowadays are more likely to experience loneliness and dissatisfaction with their lives in comparison with their parents.
In summary, a dominance of social media will do more harm than good to the society as direct connections have advantages that can not be replaced by online ones.
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- Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 230, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...le, I firmly hold the view that this is an detrimental trend due to negative effec...
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Line 6, column 201, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'never' is usually put before the verb 'can'.
Suggestion: never can
...e nature of online interactions, people can never really know who are behind the screen, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, moreover, really, so, therefore, well, while, in summary, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1826.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.60122699387 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09690796564 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.631901840491 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.3980852532 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.461538462 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0769230769 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46153846154 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155631603221 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566283353698 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045197391805 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0817027845688 0.151304729494 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0446677297212 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 50.2224549098 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.5 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.4 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 78.4519038076 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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