The education of young people is highly prioritized in many countries. However, educating adults who cannot write or read is even more important and governments should spend more money on this. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
We can see all over the world that a developed country is one with a well-developed education system. Therefore, focusing on education is crucial. There are valid arguments for and against governments' investing more in illiterate adults or children. In my opinion, children should be prioritized. I will explain the reasons in the following paragraphs.
First, children are the future of a country. They are becoming the next working class and the next authorities. Before that, they ought to be trained from an early age. If the future generations are well educated, they will attain fundamental skills as well as knowledge about various economic and social aspects, which will increase their productivity at work. As a result, they will produce more benefits for themselves and the country. Second, at a young age, this is the stage that has the most advantages for absorbing new knowledge, leading to the conclusion that investing in children will cost less money and time than investing in adults. For example, according to ABC College's science research in Vietnam, children are more open-minded and flexible learners, so their ability to learn new information is enormous. Thus, raising children's awareness is an effective way to help a nation become more prosperous.
Admittedly, adults are the majority of the working class who support children. If they improve their education, they may have more opportunities to make more money. However, if a country's goal is to be well-developed, civilized, and modern, future generations should be prepared at the start of their lives.
In conclusion, going through human history, education has attracted the attention of governments. This demonstrates the importance of focusing on children's intellectual development for the long-term vision of the nation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1528.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39929328622 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06383450457 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.600706713781 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.437593315 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.8823529412 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6470588235 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.41176470588 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157320111412 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0525680399674 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0382967575228 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108364333873 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0363232416539 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.74 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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