The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The given chart depicts how much teenagers in Mauritius consume 3 kinds of fast food over the period from 1985 to 2015.
What stands out from the chart is that the amount of hamburger and fried chicken consumed per year experienced the same trend during the given period, whilst there was a gradual decline in the number pizza eaten .
In 1985, the amount of pizza consumed was highest, at 60 times per year, while the figure for hamburger and fried chicken was noticeable lower , at only 10 and 5 respectively. But after that year, a dramatical drop was saw in the figures of pizza. This continued falling down during the period given without any fluctuation and then stop at the bottom most point ,10 . this number was 6 times lower than it was in the beginning of the period and it become the lowest among 3 data.
turning into the downward trend of the 2 others, hamburger annually consumption had a significant progress and became the highest figure in the line graph , at 70., while there was a bounce of 65 in the number of fried chicken in the period of 20 from 1985 to 2005, then this figure remained the same for the next 5 years and had a very small rise in the last year.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 29, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
The given chart depicts how much teenagers in Mauritius consume 3 kinds ...
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Line 2, column 200, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...here was a gradual decline in the number pizza eaten . In 1985, the amount of pi...
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Line 2, column 213, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...adual decline in the number pizza eaten . In 1985, the amount of pizza consumed ...
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Line 3, column 83, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...highest, at 60 times per year, while the figure for hamburger and fried chicken ...
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Line 3, column 105, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...er year, while the figure for hamburger and fried chicken was noticeable lower ,...
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Line 3, column 145, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... and fried chicken was noticeable lower , at only 10 and 5 respectively. But afte...
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Line 3, column 211, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ively. But after that year, a dramatical drop was saw in the figures of pizza. Th...
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Line 3, column 365, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...n and then stop at the bottom most point ,10 . this number was 6 times lower than ...
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Line 3, column 369, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...d then stop at the bottom most point ,10 . this number was 6 times lower than it w...
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Line 3, column 372, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...hen stop at the bottom most point ,10 . this number was 6 times lower than it was in...
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Line 3, column 452, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'becomes'?
Suggestion: becomes
...s in the beginning of the period and it become the lowest among 3 data. turning into ...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Turning
...and it become the lowest among 3 data. turning into the downward trend of the 2 others...
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Line 4, column 59, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ownward trend of the 2 others, hamburger annually consumption had a significant p...
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Line 4, column 156, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ame the highest figure in the line graph , at 70., while there was a bounce of 65 ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 968.0 965.302439024 100% => OK
No of words: 217.0 196.424390244 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.46082949309 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8380880478 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29879395233 2.65546596893 87% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 106.607317073 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552995391705 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 281.7 283.868780488 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.4926829268 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.4718647499 43.030603864 213% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 138.285714286 112.824112599 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0 22.9334400587 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.85714285714 5.23603664747 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 1.69756097561 825% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101711151119 0.215688989381 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0619853512214 0.103423049105 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107042242255 0.0843802449381 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10595325469 0.15604864568 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124377553973 0.0819641961636 152% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.2329268293 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.39 61.2550243902 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.3012195122 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.18 11.4140731707 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.9970731707 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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