Some famous athletes and entertainers earn millions of dollars every year. Do you
think these people deserve such high salaries? Use specific reasons and examples
to support your opinion.
These days, there is a controversy concerning the millions of dollars that famous
athletes and entertainers earn every year. Some people say that these celebrities are
overpaid and do not deserve such high salaries for what they do. On the other hand,
others believe that the celebrities deserve it. I agree with the latter opinion because
people have the right to earn as much money as they can as long as they do it legally,
and because celebrities are paid what the market for their skills bring.
First of all, in free democratic societies, people have the right to earn as much
money as they are legally capable of. Some business people, doctors, and lawyers
also earn millions of dollars every year. In a democracy, people have the right to earn
money in exchange for their skills. When people have talent and work hard to
develop it, they have as much opportunity as anyone else to earn a large salary.
Most celebrities and professional athletes worked hard developing themselves to get
to where they are in their professions. As members of a democratic society, they
have the freedom to do so. As long as celebrities are making their money legally,
there is no reason why they should not receive large salaries.
In addition, celebrities and athletes are receiving what the market will allow. This is
one aspect of capitalism. Entertainment is a business. A popular baseball team can
bring millions, or even billions, of dollars into an economy. The players are the
reason for the economic money flow, so that makes them and their skills valuable
commodities. Furthermore, when a city has a successful baseball team, the entire
city receives economic benefits due to the performance of the players. If celebrities
or athletes perform poorly over an extended period of time, they lose value on the
market and their salary will fall. Those are the rules of the open market.
Finally, actors and athletes deserve high salaries because they work very hard at
what they do. Athletes often spend hours training and film stars work on their lines
and filming scenes for months, this is why they deserve to be paid an amount
commensurate to the time and work they put in doing what they do. They also have
to pay their agents, publicist, cleaners, nannies, stylists a lot of money for their
services. Celebrities also sacrifice a lot to do what they do so many of them don’t get to enjoy family time, relationships, being able to go in public without getting
attention.
To conclude, I believe that athletes and entertainers deserve these salaries because
they have the right to earn as much money as they want as long as it is legal and
they have the right to receive what they are worth in a free market society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...me people say that these celebrities are overpaid and do not deserve such high sa...
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...me business people, doctors, and lawyers also earn millions of dollars every year...
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...democracy, people have the right to earn money in exchange for their skills. When...
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...When people have talent and work hard to develop it, they have as much opportunit...
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...ars into an economy. The players are the reason for the economic money flow, so t...
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...hat makes them and their skills valuable commodities. Furthermore, when a city ha...
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...s a successful baseball team, the entire city receives economic benefits due to t...
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...rformance of the players. If celebrities or athletes perform poorly over an exten...
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...thletes perform poorly over an extended period of time, they lose value on the market and th...
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...d period of time, they lose value on the market and their salary will fall. Those...
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...ining and film stars work on their lines and filming scenes for months, this is w...
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...is why they deserve to be paid an amount commensurate to the time and work they p...
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...ut in doing what they do. They also have to pay their agents, publicist, cleaners...
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...nnies, stylists a lot of money for their services. Celebrities also sacrifice a l...
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...ing able to go in public without getting attention. To conclude, I believe that...
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...ertainers deserve these salaries because they have the right to earn as much mone...
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... as they want as long as it is legal and they have the right to receive what they...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2307.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9085106383 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57510190897 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446808510638 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 711.0 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3803015842 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.125 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5833333333 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.625 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 32.0 4.53405017921 706% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 28.0 5.5376344086 506% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212283703017 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769023339684 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0908908353627 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0688464287464 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0846272980543 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ning the millions of dollars that famous athletes and entertainers earn every yea...
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...me people say that these celebrities are overpaid and do not deserve such high sa...
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...ies for what they do. On the other hand, others believe that the celebrities dese...
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... I agree with the latter opinion because people have the right to earn as much mo...
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... they can as long as they do it legally, and because celebrities are paid what th...
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...s, people have the right to earn as much money as they are legally capable of. So...
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...me business people, doctors, and lawyers also earn millions of dollars every year...
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...democracy, people have the right to earn money in exchange for their skills. When...
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...When people have talent and work hard to develop it, they have as much opportunit...
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...worked hard developing themselves to get to where they are in their professions. ...
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...As members of a democratic society, they have the freedom to do so. As long as ce...
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...ebrities are making their money legally, there is no reason why they should not r...
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...ving what the market will allow. This is one aspect of capitalism. Entertainment ...
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... a business. A popular baseball team can bring millions, or even billions, of dol...
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...ars into an economy. The players are the reason for the economic money flow, so t...
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...hat makes them and their skills valuable commodities. Furthermore, when a city ha...
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...s a successful baseball team, the entire city receives economic benefits due to t...
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...rformance of the players. If celebrities or athletes perform poorly over an exten...
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...thletes perform poorly over an extended period of time, they lose value on the market and th...
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...d period of time, they lose value on the market and their salary will fall. Those...
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... salaries because they work very hard at what they do. Athletes often spend hours...
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...ining and film stars work on their lines and filming scenes for months, this is w...
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...is why they deserve to be paid an amount commensurate to the time and work they p...
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...ut in doing what they do. They also have to pay their agents, publicist, cleaners...
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...nnies, stylists a lot of money for their services. Celebrities also sacrifice a l...
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...ing able to go in public without getting attention. To conclude, I believe that...
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...ertainers deserve these salaries because they have the right to earn as much mone...
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... as they want as long as it is legal and they have the right to receive what they...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, if, so, in addition, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2307.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9085106383 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57510190897 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446808510638 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 711.0 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3803015842 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.125 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5833333333 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.625 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 32.0 4.53405017921 706% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 28.0 5.5376344086 506% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212283703017 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769023339684 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0908908353627 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0688464287464 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0846272980543 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.