New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
Technology has always been a controversial topic for generations. Many people think that the technology have influenced on the relaxing way of children, but others argue that everything is remained and nothing has been changed. In spite of this, I still believe that there are some differences in the way children spend their past time.
On the one hand, the young nowadays do not spend much time on playing traditional games compared with the past. With a click on the screen, there will be a range of entertaining way, which are always extremely addictive, children therefore likely spend hours in their rooms without any communication with the outside world. In fact, the children at school age are suffering from short-sighted due to playing video games or watching YouTube for a long time.
On the other hand, thanks to new technologies, children have more conditions in learning. They can use them to search for new information or relax. Some parents just allow them to use their phone at a certain time a day. The old know how to control their children so the technologies just bring them benefits and without any influences. For example, youngers are allowed to use smartphones when they have finished their homework and they get 30 minutes a day for using phones. And another time they should go outside to do exercise and play with their friends.
In conclusion, in my view, although there are still many drawbacks of new technologies, the disadvantages outweigh the benefits. So, I still believe that modern devices will not influence much on the way children spend their free time, it just depends on the time and way they use it.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 327, Rule ID: PAST_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
...erences in the way children spend their past time. On the one hand, the young nowadays d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, still, therefore, for example, in conclusion, in fact, in my view, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1371.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91397849462 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72638549884 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.562724014337 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9055657108 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.9285714286 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9285714286 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.85714285714 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.363964097384 0.244688304435 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11907836357 0.084324248473 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624044697024 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225054735681 0.151304729494 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0580457083227 0.056905535591 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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