It has been suggested that all young adults should be required to undertake a period of unpaid work helping people in the community. Would the drawbacks be greater than benefits to the community and the young adults themselves?
People said young people should be forced to work without paying for salary in order to help people in society. Which has been a controversial topic of debate for a long time. Some people consider it to have drawbacks more than benefits for the community, whereas another group of people do not think so. I strongly opine that it brings a wide range of advantages more than disadvantages and I will explain my view below.
On the one hand, it offers positive aspects. First of all, teenagers are often involved in humanitarian campaigns. As an example, teaching charity, blood donation, and a charity rice shop could be helpful. Many benefits for an individual person are to learn useful skills like communication skills or to be capable of teamwork. In addition, they can also have skills of fundraising that are useful for their future. Moreover, they can take advantage of that time so that they can continue to validate both their career and their own. The children, especially, enjoy a great time and learn to value something without paying money. Some of the benefits for society are the fact that communities have become more picturesque and well-developed, and people's solidarity is closer.
On the other hand, it has some drawbacks. Young adults do not have enough money to pay their daily expenses, which can put heavy pressure on the government. Leading to a decreased economy. Some of the work makes the young lose their passion and patience.
In conclusion, I see that the benefits are more than the disadvantages. Teenagers should try something new without paying money
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Some
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, moreover, so, well, whereas, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1327.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98872180451 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74214814491 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.575187969925 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 417.6 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.5614803103 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.7222222222 106.682146367 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7777777778 20.7667163134 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27777777778 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214234405865 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0551658912266 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620905843209 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121196594561 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0532698652846 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.0946893788 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 50.2224549098 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 11.3001002004 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.07 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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