Governments should ban dangerous sports. Others think that people should have the freedom to do any sport activity. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
Nowadays, opinions differ as to whether it is much better for hazardous sports to be forbidden. Although some experts opine that authorities ought to prohibit risky sports, I would argue that individuals are free to opt what sports they can play.
On the one hand, there are some factors advocating the belief that dangerous sports need banning. The first justification stems from the jeopardy and risks that these types of sports could bring about. For example, due to the severe whether condition of mount Everest, there are a vast array of confirmed accidents happening to mountaineers those who have the desire to conquer this summit . It leads to the fact that these people may confront the possibility of death. Moreover, amateurs are required to spare a great amount of money in order to ensure their safety and hire professional trainers when partaking in dangerous sports. To illustrate, a journey to the Everest summit costs approximately $50000, which surpasses the affordable price of many individuals .In lieu of spending too much money on these games, it might be useful for players to allocate their budgets to make investments or to donate for charities.
On the other hand, plentiful reasons have persuaded me to think that people have freedom to participate in any sport activities they prefer. Firstly, joining in these sports is able to help many players to gain experience owning to the obstacles and dangers they could face and undergo. For instance, overcoming challenges on the road to Everest summit honed the mountain climbing aptitudes of Phan Thanh Nhien, who is the first Vietnamese to succeed in reaching the peak. But for this journey, he would not have brought the victory and pride to his nation and become reputative. Furthermore, thanks to these extreme sports like parachuting or skydiving, many people can enjoy the exquisite and spectacular landscapes from high altitudes, which may add the excitement and interest to these sports. Thus, these amateurs can unwind and become aware of the beauty of the Earth.
In conclusion, admittedly, taking part in risky sports might jeopardise the lives of players; nevertheless, the values and benefits that humans could reap of these games might offset the drawbacks.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 27, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
Nowadays, opinions differ as to whether it is much better for hazardous sports ...
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Line 2, column 286, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'arrays'?
Suggestion: arrays
...tion of mount Everest, there are a vast array of confirmed accidents happening to mou...
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Line 2, column 328, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'mountaineer'.
Suggestion: mountaineer
...ray of confirmed accidents happening to mountaineers those who have the desire to conquer th...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 389, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...o have the desire to conquer this summit . It leads to the fact that these people ...
^^
Line 2, column 763, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...the affordable price of many individuals .In lieu of spending too much money on th...
^^
Line 2, column 765, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...e affordable price of many individuals .In lieu of spending too much money on thes...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, thus, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1885.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 365.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16438356164 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69965956825 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591780821918 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.1428619048 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.666666667 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3333333333 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.53333333333 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175291137185 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0620040236551 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0740969179976 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0997827677726 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0488410399473 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 27, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
Nowadays, opinions differ as to whether it is much better for hazardous sports ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 286, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'arrays'?
Suggestion: arrays
...tion of mount Everest, there are a vast array of confirmed accidents happening to mou...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 328, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'mountaineer'.
Suggestion: mountaineer
...ray of confirmed accidents happening to mountaineers those who have the desire to conquer th...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 389, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...o have the desire to conquer this summit . It leads to the fact that these people ...
^^
Line 2, column 763, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...the affordable price of many individuals .In lieu of spending too much money on th...
^^
Line 2, column 765, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...e affordable price of many individuals .In lieu of spending too much money on thes...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, thus, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1885.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 365.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16438356164 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69965956825 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591780821918 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.1428619048 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.666666667 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3333333333 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.53333333333 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175291137185 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0620040236551 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0740969179976 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0997827677726 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0488410399473 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.