There has been much discussion about whether should people invest budgets and time in the safeguard of wild animals or for residents dwelling in the global impoverished areas. The later, in many cases, should be more reasonable.
Many people in the world have a extremely arduous life. For example, I saw a TV program about life in some places of Africa. In those areas, local residents do not know about electricity. For them, casual amenities, such as phone, bike or computer, are in imagination. Some citizens even do not have enough water and food. Most of children, in those places, are malnourished. Therefore, governments should support them, who dwell in poor areas, before think about the protection of wild animals.
Admittedly, the safeguard of wild animals is necessary. These days, there are some species with extinction. The extinction of them might affect to the balance of ecology. However, the disappearance or appearance of some animal species are parts of natural rule. Maybe, the intervention of human remains survival of some animals longer, but eventually, these species still disappear. History demonstrated it, such as: dinosaur, a powerful colossal species had vapoured from earth before others appeared. Moreover, humankind also is a species requiring to protect. Therefore, people should care about their own species first by spending money and time to support population dwelling in the impoverished areas.
In conclusion, I would claim that people should invest budgets and time in dwellers who live in poor areas to enhance their life before care about wild animals.
- A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income Unfortunately tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the world 84
- Advertisements are becoming more and more common in everyday life Is it a positive or negative development 56
- Many animal species are becoming extinct due to human activities on land and in sea What are the reasons and solutions to solve this issue 78
- Sending criminals to prison is not the best method of dealing with them Education and job training are better ways to help them Do you agree or disagree 78
- Some employers think that formal academic qualifications are more important than life experiences and personal qualities when they look for an employee Why is it the case Is it a positive or negative development 84
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 31, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...sonable. Many people in the world have a extremely arduous life. For example, I ...
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Line 2, column 323, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the children') or simply say ''Most children''.
Suggestion: Most of the children; Most children
...even do not have enough water and food. Most of children, in those places, are malnourished. The...
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Line 3, column 551, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'protecting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: protecting
..., humankind also is a species requiring to protect. Therefore, people should care about th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, in many cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1346.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29921259843 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7613107847 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.586614173228 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.0391783441 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.7777777778 106.682146367 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.1111111111 20.7667163134 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.27777777778 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249603078937 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0674542702862 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615865193702 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154141120276 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0378480497038 0.056905535591 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 50.2224549098 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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