Some people believe teenagers should focus on all subjects equally, whereas other
people think that they should concentrate on only those subjects that they find interesting and
they are best at. Discuss both views and give your opinion?
Nowadays, opinions differ as to whether adolescents ought to allocate their time and efforts to all disciplines. Although some experts acknowledge that it is much superior for youngsters to pay more attention on majors that they are keen on and excel at, I would advocate that all subjects need to be concentrated on equally.
On the one hand, a vast array of factors have prevailed some individuals on believing that students should devote more concentration on fields that they love and are proficient in. The first justification is that when pursuing subjects of expertise, young people can obtain more in-depth knowledge. To illustrate, but for the judicious decision of focusing more on mathematics, Ngo Bao Chau might not have gained a deeper sight into the method of proving Langland hypothesis. Thus, he could not have become reputative and the first Vietnamese to attain Field prize. Furthermore, if adolescents are given opportunities to choose which majors they have passion for, they are capable understanding lessons easily since they feel comfortable while studying. It leads to the fact that the productivity of learning could increase significantly.
On the other hand, there are a host of reasons motivating me to concede that young pupils had better to concentrate on all curriculums equally. Firstly, thanks to studying all subjects including those they are not interested in, youngsters are able to broaden their horizons. This can be perfectly exemplified that history has become a compulsory disciplines in all Vietnamese schools, so that students can know more about the historical milestones that Vietnam underwent. Accordingly, they can become more and more aware of their responsibilities with the nation and have patriotism. Moreover, through allocating time and effort equally to all majors, young individuals are able to realise their innate aptitudes. As a result, they might try their best in order to hone and promote their talents.
In conclusion, apparently, it cannot be denied that prioritising on curriculums that adolescents are professional in could be auspicious to some extent, I want to assert that it is indispensable for students to focus on all disciplines equally.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 27, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
Nowadays, opinions differ as to whether adolescents ought to allocate their tim...
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Line 3, column 32, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'hosts'?
Suggestion: hosts
...cantly. On the other hand, there are a host of reasons motivating me to concede tha...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to focus on all disciplines equally.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, apparently, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, so, thus, while, as to, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1872.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37931034483 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10293737813 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568965517241 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3944900445 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.8 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.46666666667 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255140584953 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0775956878388 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620901339579 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139895249663 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0533838820696 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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