In the present situation, the world is becoming more peaceful, compared to it hundred years ago. People are now arguing that governments worldwide should stop pouring national budgets on militaries. From the perspective of a pacifist, I totally agree with the idea of limiting expenditure on armed forces.
Speaking of military and weapons, I believe that there are plenty of reasons why money spent on them should be restricted. In this essay, I would discuss the prominent reason. I personally think that the significant amount of money used on armed forces could be transferred to other social purposes that benefit the citizen. For instance, the State budget can be used to improve the living standards for the population of the country. The most typical country which can support my opinion is North Korea, where a large number of their people are living in poor conditions, compared to their very neighbor, South Korea. I suppose that the expenditure, instead of using on arms, can be spent on building or improving infrastructure, or solving employment issues, or raising people's welfare, and so on.
On the other hand, I think governments pay a lot of money to the armed forces for several reasons. On top of it, the military is a vital protection force for a country. Although there is little war happening around the world these days, national sovereignty is of the most concern. The problem that occurred in Bien Dong can be considered as an example. Vietnamese military is responsible for protecting the maritime zones of Vietnam when China blatantly put its oil-shore in the sea outside its border.
In conclusion, spending money on armed forces can be a waste since the world is now a peaceful place. However, the military is an important part of a country and should be invested in a proper way.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 79, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a hundred'.
Suggestion: a hundred
... becoming more peaceful, compared to it hundred years ago. People are now arguing that ...
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Line 2, column 512, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...upport my opinion is North Korea, where a large number of their people are living in poor conditi...
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Line 4, column 181, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a proper way" with adverb for "proper"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...art of a country and should be invested in a proper way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, for instance, i suppose, i think, in conclusion, speaking of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1509.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94754098361 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77955835314 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577049180328 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.8712977184 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.3125 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0625 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206174371769 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0634644310335 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682647251578 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130820319078 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0435339211006 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.