Some people think young people should follow the traditions of their society. Others think that they should be free to behave as individuals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is thought by some people that children should socialize in traditional ways, while other believe that they should be free to show their own behave. From my perspective, both ways have their own benefits, however young people may be more maturity and less mental issues when they be free to show their personalities in social.
In the one hand, some young people may feel easy when they are socialize in a specific area, as traditional help them to limit it. However, young childrens are unable to show individual personalities in that areas, in doing so, they might feel they are special and different from the others which leads to hard for them to communicate with their friends are even their parents. Additionally, they might isolated themselves and likely to have mental issues that may affects their future. Take a survey in Viet Nam in 2014 for an instance, nearly 65% children sticked at home because they could not communicate with others.
In the other hand, young people who can be free to behave will make their own colour in their personalities and be more maturity in the future. In fact, it is hard to show their own behave in social which can make them be criticism by anothers people in social. Nevertheless, if those young people have strong personalities they might get risks of bad feeling that they might have after criticism. As a result, they will have their own behave and be free to show it in social.
In conclusion, I believe both methods have their own advantages, however, it should keep update the trends in current social in order to more develop in the future.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 64, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'socialized'.
Suggestion: socialized
...oung people may feel easy when they are socialize in a specific area, as traditional help...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, nevertheless, so, while, in conclusion, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1330.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78417266187 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52063580985 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 176.041082164 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471223021583 0.561755894193 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 405.9 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.2320584573 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.909090909 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2727272727 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.09090909091 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319818039028 0.244688304435 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14922770391 0.084324248473 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0886201319462 0.0667982634062 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21118299958 0.151304729494 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0944134468665 0.056905535591 166% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 78.4519038076 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 64, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'socialized'.
Suggestion: socialized
...oung people may feel easy when they are socialize in a specific area, as traditional help...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, nevertheless, so, while, in conclusion, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1330.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78417266187 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52063580985 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 176.041082164 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471223021583 0.561755894193 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 405.9 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.2320584573 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.909090909 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2727272727 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.09090909091 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319818039028 0.244688304435 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14922770391 0.084324248473 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0886201319462 0.0667982634062 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21118299958 0.151304729494 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0944134468665 0.056905535591 166% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 78.4519038076 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.