Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people belive that becauce many human are living much longer, the age which individuals retire from work should be increase considerably, but i can not agree with this view anymore. The following essay this statement in detail.
At firts, the reason why i can can not accept is that the older really need the times for relaxing after their hole life hard working to contribute their ability for the development of their country. The retire is seen like achivement and responsibility of the goverment and nation give for the amazing things which they contribute in the past. For instance, in some development country like america, australia and britain the goverment have a plenty of wonderful policy to support, provide and share difficuls with peple at the of their life.
Furthermore, nowaday people are living much longer but this is not meaning that the citizens have enough energy, strongth and mentality to cope with pressure or stress from their business after their retire age. And also when the older take retirement, there is a opportunity for the youngs generations show their ability to alternative the older generation. some individuals think that when people retire from work raised considerably, people will have more time, inspiration and motivation to contribute for their nation, moreover the older will be a instructor of teenager, children and the youngs generation, but that trend do not sure about their strongth and it make lead a terrible influence for themselves at the end of their life.
To conclude, in my opinion i am not really agree with that statement , because people after the retire age need the time for relaxing, comfortable and taking distance away from stress. they spend their young's life for contributing to the development of the nation, so at the end of their's life can can take break and enjoy life to the fullest.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 121, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'increased'?
Suggestion: increased
... individuals retire from work should be increase considerably, but i can not agree with ...
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Line 1, column 148, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...rk should be increase considerably, but i can not agree with this view anymore. T...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...owing essay this statement in detail. At firts, the reason why i can can not a...
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Line 2, column 28, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...in detail. At firts, the reason why i can can not accept is that the older re...
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Line 2, column 30, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: can
... detail. At firts, the reason why i can can not accept is that the older really nee...
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Line 2, column 204, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... for the development of their country. The retire is seen like achivement and responsibil...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...culs with peple at the of their life. Furthermore, nowaday people are living m...
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Line 3, column 63, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... people are living much longer but this is not meaning that the citizens have enough energy, s...
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Line 3, column 265, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...hen the older take retirement, there is a opportunity for the youngs generations ...
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Line 3, column 362, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
...ty to alternative the older generation. some individuals think that when people reti...
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Line 3, column 554, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...heir nation, moreover the older will be a instructor of teenager, children and th...
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Line 3, column 671, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
Suggestion: makes
...do not sure about their strongth and it make lead a terrible influence for themselve...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... themselves at the end of their life. To conclude, in my opinion i am not real...
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Line 4, column 30, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ir life. To conclude, in my opinion i am not really agree with that statement...
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Line 4, column 71, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... am not really agree with that statement , because people after the retire age nee...
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Line 4, column 95, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...h that statement , because people after the retire age need the time for relaxing, comfort...
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Line 4, column 188, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...e and taking distance away from stress. they spend their youngs life for contributin...
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Line 4, column 297, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: can
...he nation, so at the end of theirs life can can take break and enjoy life to the fulles...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, really, so, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1556.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 310.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01935483871 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65540740187 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509677419355 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 496.8 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.1194666312 49.4020404114 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.6 106.682146367 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0 20.7667163134 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.7 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.01903807615 359% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244708764607 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108839789005 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123254691956 0.0667982634062 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182082120701 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109152471203 0.056905535591 192% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 13.0946893788 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 50.2224549098 80% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.43 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 121, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'increased'?
Suggestion: increased
... individuals retire from work should be increase considerably, but i can not agree with ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 148, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...rk should be increase considerably, but i can not agree with this view anymore. T...
^
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...owing essay this statement in detail. At firts, the reason why i can can not a...
^^
Line 2, column 28, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...in detail. At firts, the reason why i can can not accept is that the older re...
^
Line 2, column 30, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: can
... detail. At firts, the reason why i can can not accept is that the older really nee...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 204, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... for the development of their country. The retire is seen like achivement and responsibil...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...culs with peple at the of their life. Furthermore, nowaday people are living m...
^^
Line 3, column 63, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... people are living much longer but this is not meaning that the citizens have enough energy, s...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 265, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...hen the older take retirement, there is a opportunity for the youngs generations ...
^
Line 3, column 362, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
...ty to alternative the older generation. some individuals think that when people reti...
^^^^
Line 3, column 554, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...heir nation, moreover the older will be a instructor of teenager, children and th...
^
Line 3, column 671, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
Suggestion: makes
...do not sure about their strongth and it make lead a terrible influence for themselve...
^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... themselves at the end of their life. To conclude, in my opinion i am not real...
^^
Line 4, column 30, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ir life. To conclude, in my opinion i am not really agree with that statement...
^
Line 4, column 71, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... am not really agree with that statement , because people after the retire age nee...
^^
Line 4, column 95, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...h that statement , because people after the retire age need the time for relaxing, comfort...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 188, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...e and taking distance away from stress. they spend their youngs life for contributin...
^^^^
Line 4, column 297, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: can
...he nation, so at the end of theirs life can can take break and enjoy life to the fulles...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, really, so, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1556.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 310.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01935483871 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65540740187 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509677419355 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 496.8 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.1194666312 49.4020404114 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.6 106.682146367 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0 20.7667163134 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.7 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.01903807615 359% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244708764607 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108839789005 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123254691956 0.0667982634062 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182082120701 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109152471203 0.056905535591 192% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 13.0946893788 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 50.2224549098 80% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.43 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.