Some educationalists say that every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people believe that every teenagers should be taught how to play a musical instrument. I mostly agree with this notion, because music have a plenty of advantage for the individuals not only for child. The following essay will analyse this statement in detail.
To begin, music is a good method to heal the pain of each person, helping citizens happier, more comfortable and break out from stress by the interseting melody, so every children should be taught how to play a musical instrument to reduce their pessure and balance their life. Furthermore, some traditional instrument or some type of music is considered like the heritage of cultural has pass down from older generation, so the youngs generation have to protect, inheritance and respect that kind of music. For instance, in the cultural of vietnamese we have a lot of instrument such as monochord, erhu and flute, and about music we have Hue royal music or Quan Ho folk songs.
In addition, playing instrument will help student forget their bored, tired and stress and also to exaggeration that teenagers can avoid the society's vices. music will help each student avoid addicted to game or drugs, so teenagers can have more comfortable mentality to understand knowledge on the class. following that they will have a bright future and contribute their ability to the development of nation. Moreover, from each music student can get amazing knowledge which musician send in each their art. this will help teenagers have other opinon on each aspect of the social and realdy to cope with every difficult, risks and challenge in their life. To illustrates, music will give them motivation to address their problem, lyrics and melody can give them advide and heal their pain.
To conclude, music is wonderful magic that the god bring for us that can heal our pain, warm our heart, and be our friends, so youngs generation should be taught how to play a musical instrument to balance their life , wake up their potential and be a helpful individual in the near future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, for instance, in addition, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1689.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 342.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93859649123 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58782447284 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523391812865 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 525.6 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.217802948 49.4020404114 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.923076923 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3076923077 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53846153846 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24456779503 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10122260002 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120068647786 0.0667982634062 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191794154145 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0887963417037 0.056905535591 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.