The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Aspects of how one like to proceed in life differs from one another. Some might find luxuries and contemporary as important aspect while others might not. One with opulence can do some extraordinary work while some cannot. It totally depends on for what purpose luxuries are need and how are utilized. How a person utilize his luxury depends on teachings he received from parents, how keen he is to solve the problems which are faced by middle class citizens and many more things. I do partially agree with the topic.
Having luxuries life from birth do affect one on negative side heavily while for some don't. For example, The business tycoon of India Mr. Anil Dhirubhai Ambani who used to be in Forbes Top 10 Richest Peoples in World list is now leaving mediocre life. Some experts say he was not keen in expanding his wealth out of core sectors while say he was not smart enough to take over as net worth inherited from Mr. Dhirubhai Ambani. From this example we can say that it was his luxuries life which kept him away from being get developed as true leader in company. Sometimes, factors dont work according to our need we need to try to change ourself in such a way that we can use such unconsistent factors according to our need.
On contrary, Mr. Mukesh Ambani who inherited almost same amount of net worth but it was his due intelligence, smartness and consistency which kept him developing as true leader in business sector of India. Mukesh Ambani who is registered as one of the top 10 Richest people in world while some time earlier he wasn't even in top 100 people. Even he had some luxuries life but he choose to be a true leader. Luxuries not always works great for everyone but while might for some. Some use luxury life earning for donation purpose too. One of such person is Mr. Ratan Tata who was once chairman of Tata Group. Tata group of companies has learned to be generous if life. Tata Group is well known for their donation to people who really deserved. It is well known fact that Tata Group donates more than 65% of earning to charity which take care of extreme poor people.
It is discipline, will and parental teaching on offspring which teaches a child how to behave in particular situation. From example of Ambani Family we can say that it was their will power which impacted life and drastically change the situation for life. While one became leader of well known company and other became bankrupt.
Luxuries and conveniences do matter but upto some extinct in developing truly kind heart, strong and independent individuals. One cant avoid other factors such as parental teaching, discipline and will to bring about change.
- In any situation progress requires discussion among people who have contrasting points of view 50
- Main benefit of the history is to dispel illusion that people living now are significantly different from people who lived in earlier times 66
- Educational institutions should encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers 58
- People s behaviour is largely determined by forces not of their own making 66
- All parents should be required to volunteer time to their children s schools 58
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, really, so, well, while, for example, in particular, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2194.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 469.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67803837953 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3802205327 2.79657885939 85% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494669509595 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 702.0 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.2158342678 60.3974514979 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.76 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.76 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.76 5.21951772744 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189231380227 0.243740707755 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0575473616887 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653348185847 0.0758088955206 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116321205995 0.150359130593 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454032667512 0.0667264976115 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 12.1639044944 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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