Some people say that we do not need printed paper newspapers Do you agree or disagree

In this day and age, a majority of people believe that producing newspapers is not essential. I partially agree with this view that access to the Internet is not widely available all over the world.
On the one hand, most people are not interested in reading on electronic devices, especially the old generation. First of all, the elderly don’t like looking at the telephone screens for a long time, because they can have a headache and lose memory. Instead, they use newspapers and magazines to receive sources of new information. In addition, severe myopia is not allowed to contact with the radiation of blue light from the screen for too long time because it is harmful to the eyes as well as easy to be visual impairment. To remedy that situation, they prioritize reading books and newspapers to reduce eye habitation and practice perseverance. For example, a girl - Mafia, watched cartoons on her phone too much in a day, which caused her to lose one eye and have to be treated in the hospital from May to now.
On the other hand, paper-based articles take a long time to edit and publish, so updating the new information on social media is the best way to provide the exact and fastly information for everyone. Moreover, people only spend a few minutes accessing the Internet to receive up-to-the-minute information instead of obtaining current news in newspapers. For instance, when Covid - 19 broke out, the information about the occurrence and its consequence on almost social networking such as TV and the Internet.
In conclusion, both views have different strengths and weaknesses points, but I completely agree with bringing up-to- date on social media thanks to updating quickly and saving
nature materials.

Votes
Average: 1.1 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 672, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tice perseverance. For example, a girl - Mafia, watched cartoons on her phone too...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, may, moreover, so, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1442.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00694444444 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85082127224 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607638888889 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2944723282 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.166666667 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.8333333333 7.06120827912 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0698516749983 0.244688304435 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0288651064634 0.084324248473 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0265053765078 0.0667982634062 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0460273009522 0.151304729494 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0248897215788 0.056905535591 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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