The charts show information about children learning musical instruments in 1996 and 2016 in the UK

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The charts show information about children learning musical instruments in 1996 and 2016 in the UK.

The charts give information about the percentage of children
learning musical instruments and what types of musicals do the
children chose between 1996 and 2016 in the UK
 
Overall, it is clear that the percentage of teenagers who learned
musical instruments increased significantly, and in terms of bar
charts, the keyboard and piano option was the most growth and
became popular in the UK during the same time.
 
Looking at the pie chart, the rate of learning music took up more
than half in 1996, about 56%, and the number of children who
didn’t play music was lower than 12%, at 44%. after 20 years,
there was an enormous change in learning musical instruments,
it upsurged to 76% compared to 1996. moreover, the proportion
of teenagers not playing music decreased remarkably by around
24% at the same time.
 
Turning to the bar chart, starting at 30%, the choice of the
keyboard was the most interested in learning music in 2016,
followed by the piano, around 27%. In addition, more than 10%
of children who choice electric guitar and more than one
instrument. The fourth-ranked was for violin, only 10%. finally,
the least choice learning was for acoustic guitar and others, at
3% and 2% respectively.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, look, moreover, as for, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1051.0 965.302439024 109% => OK
No of words: 208.0 196.424390244 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05288461538 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66125203411 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 106.607317073 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552884615385 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 284.4 283.868780488 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 108.080699017 43.030603864 251% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 131.375 112.824112599 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 22.9334400587 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.23603664747 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 21.0 3.83414634146 548% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.405654041044 0.215688989381 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150624150742 0.103423049105 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.146309726544 0.0843802449381 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110529302941 0.15604864568 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102381860746 0.0819641961636 125% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.2329268293 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 61.2550243902 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 11.4140731707 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 26.5 11.4329268293 232% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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