Globalization and consumerism have made human being, as a species, more greedier than ever. Most of the activities done by people based on self interest are shown as if they are for welfare of others. However, there are still others who do things purely for benefit of others rebuking this statement. Thus, I don't agree with the prompt and the reason mentioned for following reasons.
To begin, we have seen this several times throughout the history. For instance, Ratan Tata is the founder of Tata motors, leading automobile producer in India, whose vehicles are running through the highways around the globe. He is as famous as an donator as he is famous as an industrialist. He has contributed to education and healthcare of rural villages around the world. Indian Movie star Aamir Khan is another example. He established Paani Foundation with the help of hydrology experts and organized a water harvesting competition in Maharastra, India. Hundreds of villages participated in the competition, implementing various ideas of water harvesting in order to combat long drought seasons prevalent in the region. This competition not only helped villagers develop capacity to combat drought in the season, but also brought several ancient technologies combating inclement weather into limelight. These technologies can now be used around the globe combat and reverse hazards related with climate change. However, these magnanimous activities are brought to the world just because these people are already famous. Each and every person is doing works for benefit of others, which are not brought into limelight.
Besides these, there are activities that are done solely for inner peace, or to satisfy soul. Saints from all religions around the globe agree that giving or doing great things for others will give us much required inner peace. There is a quote in Hindu text "Whatever you do to others, karma will bring it back to you". And with growing concern of our society towards spiritual awakening, these things are reaching more and more audiences. As a result, people are being more concerned to benefit of others.
Since we have recently seen several examples of people doing great things for others just to upload their activities in social media, and being viral. Some others speak their activities in social media with high spirit and get views and likes. It is true that these activities reach more audiences compared to activities done by those who do not express so much. However, this does not necessarily mean that these viral-hungy people dominate the large portion of our society. there are more people who does selfless activities truely for sake of others.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 68, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'greedier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: greedier
...sm have made human being, as a species, more greedier than ever. Most of the activities done ...
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Line 1, column 310, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...others rebuking this statement. Thus, I dont agree with the prompt and the reason me...
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Line 2, column 246, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ys around the globe. He is as famous as an donator as he is famous as an industria...
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Line 4, column 477, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...inate the large portion of our society. there are more people who does selfless activ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, so, still, thus, for instance, as a result, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2251.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 434.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1866359447 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63092174737 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559907834101 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 713.7 704.065955056 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.7361329421 60.3974514979 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.04 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.36 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.48 5.21951772744 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236964975801 0.243740707755 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0641213438526 0.0831039109588 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0777389592729 0.0758088955206 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171655677417 0.150359130593 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104736775437 0.0667264976115 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.