Children today are too dependent on computers and electronic entertainment It would be better for them to be outside playing sports and taking part in more traditional pastimes than spending all day indoors Do you agree or disagree with this statement Wri

In this day and age, children are addicted to technical gadgets like computers and electronic entertainment; therefore, playing outdoor sports and participating in more traditional pastimes are better than staying in front of a screen. In my perspective, I believe that it is more beneficial for children to be exposed to different kinds of outside sports, as this would have an impact on their physical health and social skills as well.

It is universally agreed that children who play sports are certain that these physical activities make them stronger and healthier. A good example to illustrate this idea is that when they play sports like football, basketball, or volleyball, they reduce the risk of developing health conditions such as heart disease, cancer, and so on. Furthermore, being sports-minded would motivate you to be an extrovert and always be physically fit.

In addition, the kids who are taking part in more traditional pastimes are the ones who have developed camaraderie and interpersonal relationships. This would help them learn the art of teamwork, develop skills that are vital for competitions, and sharpen their leadership qualities. Moreover, these skills would be a good foundation, which undoubtedly would apply later in their future career lives.

In a nutshell, children should always be motivated to engage in outdoor activities and introduced to traditional sports that would make them more interested and allow them to learn the benefits which would last for their lifetime if they kept on playing sports instead of sitting in front of computer screens and taking the risk of physical diseases.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, in addition, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1386.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 257.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39299610895 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02915726381 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556420233463 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.1271846637 49.4020404114 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.0 106.682146367 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5555555556 20.7667163134 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.55555555556 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368607395813 0.244688304435 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149335808352 0.084324248473 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682186376895 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228369528128 0.151304729494 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497190180606 0.056905535591 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 13.0946893788 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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