In some cultures, children are encouraged to compete against each other. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this approach?
Youngsters in particular cultures are instilled to compete with one another. The issue would prompt, despite some considerable demerits, several merits which I will elaborate in the following paragraph.
While the significant drawbacks of motivating competitiveness in children would be constantly induce a sense of superiority over others. Published by National Institute of Health, bullying incidents in the classroom often occurs because of aggressive behaviour to intimidate someone. Specifically, individuals may develop narcissistic personality disorder and inferior sense to others. Furthermore, outperforming excellent result contributes to high levels of stress. Along with parent’s expectations, achievement pressure inflicts a tendency to blame and compare oneself to others. As reported by Kyodo News, the excessive competition enrolling prestigious school, Japanese kids are rated one of the worst age groups suffering poor mental health.
Moving to the benefits, it might be stated that this may improve children self-development, primarily shaping creativity and establishing multiple talents. Unconsciously, young learners will devote greater attention and effort to develop strategies which initiate them to gain growth mindset exploring new ideas. Moreover, challenge exposure can accelerate child’s resilience to deal with real life situation. Psychology today presents that 30% students of New York City School accepting failure may put their hard work to complete difficult tests. Considering that, as they are growing older, Juveniles will become accustomed to challenges, allowing them to be perseverant.
In summary, through cultivating young generation to count against/prevail over others could be the potential negatives, including to be conceited child and to encounter growing frustration. However, the positives of this may lead to higher self-esteem and greater self-actualisation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, while, in particular, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1660.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.24060150376 5.12529762239 122% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.32897655617 2.80592935109 119% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.729323308271 0.561755894193 130% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.596342967 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.666666667 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7333333333 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.93333333333 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0857838281234 0.244688304435 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0242644456447 0.084324248473 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0338797285374 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.055239829654 0.151304729494 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336671056798 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.84 50.2224549098 57% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 18.62 12.4159519038 150% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.6 8.58950901804 135% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 78.4519038076 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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