Some people think that young people should be required to do unpaid work helping people in the community. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
In recent years, the idea of young individuals should or shouldn’t contribute their works to society without being paid has become a hotly debated topic. While there are undeniable obvious benefits, I firmly believe that the disadvantages of taking part in helping people in the community outweigh its advantages.
At the first point of discussion, doing voluntary work has several compelling benefits. Firstly, the ability to meet different kinds of people. By working in a group, young people will have a chance to communicate more with other people, therefore, extend their social circle and forge stronger relationships among citizens. Not only that, working together as a team allows them to develop their communication skills, and their teamwork. For example, in some charity events, people are asked to be divided into groups and work together doing their task. As a result, this will encourage more people to participate in physical activities, thus, feel more thankful and personally connected with other people.
However, despite these benefits. I believe that adolescents must be aware of the considerable challenges they may face. First and foremost among them is being exhausted. In other words, helping people in the community requires a lot of time and physical demands, as much voluntary work is a heavy task and time-consuming. And not many teenagers are willing to do this, because of their huge workload from studying and working. Additionally, many large companies may exploit their contribution and use them as a business tool. For example, in some remote areas, children have to work at an early age in some factory to earn money for their family, however, in fact they are selling like an item among big organizations without being paid a decent salary for what they have done.
In summary, although there are some positive sides for young people taking part in community work, the potential risks and drawbacks are outweighed the benefits. However, I think that if it is encouraged, rather than mandated, it is generally advantageous.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, i think, in fact, in summary, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1741.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25981873112 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8146886884 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589123867069 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0997624767 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.411764706 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4705882353 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.05882352941 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338513755131 0.244688304435 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0935885343004 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0852045457754 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213272402397 0.151304729494 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0321319084497 0.056905535591 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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