Some people think that national sports teams and individual men and women who represent their country should be financially supported by the government. However, others argue that they should be funded by non-government sources (Business, scholarship, etc.)
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Some people suppose that national athletes as a representation of their country should obtain financial support from the government, even though others assume that sportspersons should be funded by non-government sources. This essay will explain both perspectives throughout the following paragraphs.
Half of the society suggests that the authority provide financial support to athletes due to a part of society which has spent their income on the government’s tax. These ones have to get their rights to improve skills and guarantee after retirement. The administration must be aware of this topic because all athletes have struggled for the country. For example, all members of China's national team in the Olympics 2016 in Rio Janeiro, Brazil obtained their rights such as medals and guarantee for them and their family. This leads to the players focus on their goals and they participate in supporting the next generation in the future.
However, others mention that non-government sources should support sports players economically since the funding from the government is insufficient to aid them. Some athletes have to find side jobs to survive hence, never has the government given more attention to the quality of athlete’s life. Such contribution of non-government is crucial that athlete improve their quality in order to get the best result in the competitions. For instance, the badminton national team of Indonesia reached a peak in 2018 when the team was fully powered by Djarum Foundation. At the time, the Indonesian team won several important tournaments such as the Olympics in Japan, All England, and the Asian Games.
In conclusion, as a part of society, the athletes have to be supported by the government because they have given their best in the name of the country, yet the government which is impossible to focus only on this sector likely needs support from non-government.
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...kely needs support from non-government.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1613.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32343234323 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97886552889 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541254125413 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7631074583 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.076923077 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3076923077 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326064529306 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110260971928 0.084324248473 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110290575081 0.0667982634062 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218209993359 0.151304729494 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0720829622503 0.056905535591 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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