Your family is going to move to another town Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests

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Your family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I hope this letter finds you in great health. I am writing this letter to enquire about the admission intake mid-year for class eight.

My name is Jay Prakash and I have recently got an immediate transfer from Delhi to your city Mumbai. My son Sohail Prakash is in class eight and I had to take leave from this school as I am the sole parent.

However, his current academic year should not be missed or repeated due to the mentioned reason above. Although he has secured first place in his last year final examination, he is more interested into the technical field. I am sure he can cope up with the current syllabus. Addionally, he has also appeared scholarship examination twice and planning to further give a national science examination by the end of this year.

Therefore, I would like you to ask if they can admit my son in the same year. I understand your concern, but this will help him not to waste his one year and no gap. Please let me know when can we hear from you.
I have exclosed copy of his results.

I am looking forward to hear from you soon.

Thanking you in anticipation.

Yours sincerely,
Jay Prakash.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 19, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir or Madam, I hope this letter finds you in great he...
^^^^^
Line 12, column 22, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to hearing'.
Suggestion: to hearing
...of his results. I am looking forward to hear from you soon. Thanking you in antic...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, so, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 32.9175257732 115% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 959.0 937.175257732 102% => OK
No of words: 210.0 206.0 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56666666667 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49853018017 2.54303337028 98% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 127.690721649 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.661904761905 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 294.3 290.88556701 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.5463296008 44.8134815571 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 63.9333333333 76.5299724578 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.0 16.8248392259 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 4.34317383033 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.29896907216 163% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144021571534 0.216113520407 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.046507018298 0.0766984524023 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407316170799 0.0603063233224 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0519028046925 0.12726935374 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0408817733545 0.0580467560999 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.1 8.37731958763 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 70.7449484536 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.63 8.71597938144 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 7.59969072165 99% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 19, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir or Madam, I hope this letter finds you in great he...
^^^^^
Line 12, column 22, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to hearing'.
Suggestion: to hearing
...of his results. I am looking forward to hear from you soon. Thanking you in antic...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, so, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 32.9175257732 115% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 959.0 937.175257732 102% => OK
No of words: 210.0 206.0 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56666666667 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49853018017 2.54303337028 98% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 127.690721649 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.661904761905 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 294.3 290.88556701 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.5463296008 44.8134815571 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 63.9333333333 76.5299724578 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.0 16.8248392259 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 4.34317383033 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.29896907216 163% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144021571534 0.216113520407 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.046507018298 0.0766984524023 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407316170799 0.0603063233224 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0519028046925 0.12726935374 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0408817733545 0.0580467560999 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.1 8.37731958763 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 70.7449484536 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.63 8.71597938144 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 7.59969072165 99% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.