More and more people today are spending large amounts of money on their complexions to look younger. Why do people want to look younger? Do you think this is a positive or negative progression?
Modern society has witnessed increasing individual investment in various beauty treatments and products to achieve a more youthful appearance. This essay will elaborate on the underlying reasons for this phenomenon and argue that it is a negative development.
To commence with, the increasingly popular trend towards complexion enhancements can be attributed to two primary reasons. First and foremost, contemporary culture often associates youthfulness with success, attractiveness, and vibrancy, and people believe that following societal beauty standards like the people around them makes them more confident and happier. In South Korea which is a country well-known for the cosmetic industry, the desire to have a younger look stems from the beauty standards shaped by celebrities and famous artists. It is the media and advertising industry that amplified the importance of a younger look enticing people, regardless of age and gender, into spending money on an anti-aging treatment. Moreover, In certain professions, a youthful appearance can contribute to career success and competitiveness. The flight attendant career is the prime example as apart from knowledge and interpersonal skills tests, this position prefers candidates who have a pretty appearance or meet the basic requirement which is having clear skin complexions.
From my point of view, this trend impacts detrimentally on society’s development. The first reason for my argument is that excessive pursuit of an anti-aging process could turn into an obsession with unrealistic beauty standards, possibly leading to depression and low self-esteem among those who may feel they fall short of these standards. Consequently, this inadvertently creates a culture that overlooks the true values of people including their knowledge, experiences, and characters. Another justification for my viewpoint relates to the potential health risks that some cosmetic procedures and substances can pose. Specifically, recent years have reported numerous cases of facial rashes, severe allergies, or even skin tissue damage among people who undergo invasive procedures or overuse cosmetics, some of which unfortunately resulted in hospitalization.
In conclusion, the increased public spending on complexion improvement probably results from the influence of social standards and one’s desire for career progression. Nevertheless, I believe that this trend is negative due to body image pressure and dangerous health problems.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, look, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, well, apart from, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2135.0 1615.20841683 132% => OK
No of words: 358.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.96368715084 5.12529762239 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.3988858495 2.80592935109 121% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 176.041082164 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.634078212291 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 650.7 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.9444163577 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.333333333 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8666666667 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169900736509 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0500914054753 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0386817163546 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0937880926874 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040802748997 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 13.0946893788 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 50.2224549098 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.58 12.4159519038 142% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.86 8.58950901804 126% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 78.4519038076 176% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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