The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country

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The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country

The supplied line graph represents the comparison of four effects which make residents decide to live in the center of a city from 2000 to 2015. At first glance, it is clear that day by day, more and more people move to the capital because of some reasons namely employment, study, family or friends and adventure. Meanwhile, employment and study had considerable changes, family or friends and adventure just had little changes over the period.
It could be noticed that both family/friends and adventure reasons have the same figure of 10.000 at the first start; meanwhile, the percentage of people living in the capital city for studying was higher, approximately just over a half. Although there was not the highest figure starter, study effect was the most dramatic increase compared to the remaining. In the first half of the period, the studying reason was seen a 31% rapid growth in the population. That was also a triple number of people who came to the center city as their family and adventure. Between 2010 and 2015, there was an emphasis in the figure of studying reason since the population experienced a significant upward trend that jumped from 55.000 to nearly 90.000 just in a short time. As for both family/friends and adventure reasons, they had a steady rise over the period, but the population moved to the city as adventure was the most consistent improvement.
It was a different story for the employment effect. Although it had the highest figure of population compared to three remaining reasons, it was the only one effect which decreased gradually in the last period. From 2000 to 2010, a sharp climb was seen in the number of citizens who chose employment as a reason for moving and it reached a peak at over 90.000 in 2010, but there will have been a turning point after that. Since 2010, the proportion of people who would move for employment had a moderate fall; however, it still finished as a joint-highest with the studying reason.
To sum up, people had some reasons to move to the capital city for living. Among those reasons, except employment, all of them saw an upward trend. However, the number of people who moved to the city because of employment and study was still much more dominant than the two remaining reasons.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 394, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...90.000 in 2010, but there will have been a turning point after that. Since 2010, ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, still, while, as for, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 6.8 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 3.15609756098 349% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 16.0 5.60731707317 285% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 33.7804878049 163% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 3.97073170732 327% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1879.0 965.302439024 195% => OK
No of words: 389.0 196.424390244 198% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83033419023 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 3.73543355544 119% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61651452401 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 106.607317073 166% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45501285347 0.547539520022 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 570.6 283.868780488 201% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 1.53170731707 457% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 8.94146341463 179% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0578333241 43.030603864 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.4375 112.824112599 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3125 22.9334400587 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.125 5.23603664747 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 3.70975609756 270% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149274584906 0.215688989381 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0620169952282 0.103423049105 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627209414741 0.0843802449381 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114541959532 0.15604864568 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0405531592177 0.0819641961636 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.2329268293 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 61.2550243902 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 40.7170731707 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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