the method educating the children is a vast area either we can use the traditional method, play method, discussion and the modern method is using the multimedia device. well, merits and merits of using the internet or cellphone are depend of the situation as well as individual discipline. like coin has two side, using multimedia device also have both advantages as well as dis advantages too.
first of all, if the parents properly train the kids they use the multi media devices for the study purpose , it's all about the parent train the children.for example the recent research shows that small boy age around seven years old, he was able to solve the more complicated higher school level maths easily. when researcher the parents how come it possible for him, parents reply that they were using the internet play study website for him. because of the internet use he improved hid mathematics knowledge quickly. so it good example for merits of multi media usage in study and educating the children.
secondly, previously i mentioned that a coin has two ends like that multimedia usages also have merits and demerits. now i will explain able about the disadvantage of using multi media. most the children now a days while coming the school straight way they started playing video games,play station, watching cartoon movies and misusing internet site which is not suppose to watch.
moreover they spoiling their eyes by keep on watching or playing the video games. and eventually they are using the specks that early age itself it is horrible thing. some data says that compare with 50 year before and present situation, kid wearing the eye glasses for their eye problem nearly 25 percentage of kids which was very less when compare with 50 years before . this health issue problem has to be control at any cost.
apart from the health problem they abusing the multimedia devices, when the parents are not watching them that time the started watching porn star movies which not apt for their age am right?.this further leads them to do the social deviation activities. one of my friend's son did the same thing and became very poor study and his mind set up changed lot.
to sum up, now a days educating the children and the role of multimedia is dependent on how we directing the children and their individual personality. if we directing the kids in right way and if their mind cooperate with us then they will be in right track, if not the multi media definitely spoil their education.
so i want to conclude that educating children and multimedia influence all depend on the parents direction as well as the individual personality.so multimedia has both good and bad side like a coin.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'if', 'moreover', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'while', 'apart from', 'as to', 'for example', 'as well as', 'first of all', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.274703557312 0.229887763892 119% => OK
Verbs: 0.150197628458 0.158761421928 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0770750988142 0.0866891130778 89% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0711462450593 0.046263068375 154% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0592885375494 0.0685040099705 87% => OK
Prepositions: 0.098814229249 0.118717715034 83% => OK
Participles: 0.0474308300395 0.0351676179071 135% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.51740254297 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0118577075099 0.0309702414327 38% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.00395256916996 0.00188951952338 209% => Less particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.102766798419 0.0887237588012 116% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00592885375494 0.0209618222197 28% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0197628458498 0.0139019557991 142% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2759.0 2387.08602151 116% => OK
No of words: 463.0 408.028673835 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.95896328294 5.86048508987 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48200974243 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.315334773218 0.338922669872 93% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.239740820734 0.251872472559 95% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.166306695464 0.174417080927 95% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.110151187905 0.112833075102 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51740254297 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520518358531 0.524397521467 99% => OK
Word variations: 60.7135286544 59.2087087015 103% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6684587814 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.3684210526 20.5533526081 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.7731426674 48.84282405 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.210526316 120.699889404 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3684210526 20.5533526081 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.842105263158 0.644075263715 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.5376344086 154% => OK
Language errors: 52.0 5.54480286738 938% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 48.3425031261 45.7405998639 106% => OK
Elegance: 1.5 1.45489161554 103% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257343172382 0.300154397459 86% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0920697549011 0.103427244359 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0774559826662 0.0752933317313 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.576823047444 0.497263757937 116% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.189638913374 0.151897553556 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0972631690814 0.114077575197 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0614765226587 0.0781384742642 79% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.277228097182 0.336927656856 82% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0413370091513 0.067059652881 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148187063931 0.210909579961 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280404827327 0.0618886996521 45% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
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Rates: 76 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 23 Out of 30