The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Growth and development of a country depends upon how talented and innovating its young generation are. Some of them out of these young people will be future leaders and carry the burden for development and harmony of the country. Some of them will be future leader in government and will be youth face of the government, whereas some of them will be leading innovation and change in the industry.
Future growth of these young minds can't be solely dependent upon by instilling in them a sense of only cooperation. In this though world, where everyone is trying to get position for them, competition if the feeling that motivates them to go forward and progress in their life. Hence, I disagree with this statement, instilling in them a sense of cooperation if the best way for a society.
Firstly, someone can be satisfied with whatever work he or she is doing. He may be satisfied by how well he is currently doing his work and how well he is cooperating with his colleagues whether he works in some industry or whether he is a politician. Whereas someone wants to prove himself and get above others, this get above others feeling can be aroused only by sense of competition. This person may be cooperating well with his peers, but he wants to do more, get into shoes of people who are above his level, this can only be there if there is sense of competition.By getting into shoes of people above him, he will rise to new level in the industry or politics or any other field. He should be also cooperating well with his peers, but he should have sense of competition so that he can rise and be a leader for other people.
Secondly, if some industry comes to some college for hiring their new managers or their new executives and they need only one person. Should all students cooperate with each other or should be compete with each other ?? They may cooperate and study together, but during interview and hiring exams they have to compete if anyone of them wants to be selected. Competing means to prove that yes, he or she is better than his peers and he should be hired. Hence, competing is more necessary then cooperating if someone wants to climb the ladders of success and be a leader.
By competing, anyone can prove that he is more aware of the current field and also is more intellectual than his peers and can take more challenges, a leader should have these qualities also. He should be able to set an example of intellect and also be able to cooperate with his directs.
By instilling feeling of competition as well as cooperation, society can prepare well rounded and intellects leader which will help in growth and development of the society and country.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 572, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: By
... there if there is sense of competition.By getting into shoes of people above him,...
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Line 6, column 194, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'competed'?
Suggestion: competed
... cooperate with each other or should be compete with each other ?? They may cooperate a...
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Line 6, column 488, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...red. Hence, competing is more necessary then cooperating if someone wants to climb t...
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Line 8, column 187, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...s, a leader should have these qualities also. He should be able to set an example of...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'well', 'whereas', 'as well as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.194980694981 0.238963963785 82% => OK
Verbs: 0.169884169884 0.154291517835 110% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0598455598456 0.0886310499679 68% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0482625482625 0.0506014161523 95% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0830115830116 0.0449626384858 185% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.140926640927 0.123526278965 114% => OK
Participles: 0.0444015444015 0.0379742944744 117% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.58514613613 2.82910677849 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.023166023166 0.0316879551592 73% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0014075125626 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0733590733591 0.0950106342287 77% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.046332046332 0.0245489744465 189% => Try to use less modal verbs (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.015444015444 0.0157978311181 98% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2685.0 2899.98275862 93% => OK
No of words: 476.0 478.390804598 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.64075630252 6.0591788892 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.65681771538 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.300420168067 0.369966551584 81% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.21218487395 0.285172536893 74% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.140756302521 0.207245337619 68% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.105042016807 0.136322040163 77% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58514613613 2.82910677849 91% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 234.298850575 83% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.409663865546 0.492565540709 83% => OK
Word variations: 45.6080736211 56.8184620615 80% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 21.1264367816 90% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0526315789 23.7468607788 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2174771753 62.0618507366 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.315789474 143.81877709 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0526315789 23.7468607788 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.789473684211 0.728815259664 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.87931034483 123% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.71264367816 52% => OK
Readability: 46.2711189739 52.2641144681 89% => OK
Elegance: 1.26282051282 1.64547068916 77% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341211851651 0.39480681544 86% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.173509241535 0.11556216369 150% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.12649401083 0.0736162880345 172% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.610474497372 0.531340600358 115% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.162226761132 0.15197228837 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138236304915 0.158818324754 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0906268018812 0.0851127212816 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.301540526545 0.388921930462 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0864307572095 0.0677916285025 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216845984946 0.28015025965 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116747527078 0.0610219844235 191% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.8591954023 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.30459770115 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.96264367816 60% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.10632183908 136% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.93390804598 25% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 3.0 3.04597701149 98% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 15.0862068966 99% => OK
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Some content wanted for cooperation too.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6