Popular events like football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.
Celebration of international sports events is hotly debated topic that often divides opinions. Many people claim that celebration of world cup and other international sporting events are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in the safer way. I strongly agree with the statement and can support my opinion with following arguments.
We all should agree that sports has the quality to bind people together. It teaches people how to loose with grace and how to win with modesty. Sports event provide a platform to compete with each other in positive harmless manner. On this platforms countries can display skills and strength possessed by their youth which is the true treasure of any country.,
Furthermore, the skills which will not be challenged with the competent one, can not be improved with par excellence. Regular competition keeps the players alert about their performance and area of improvement. And that is why the events like world cup of cricket, football, Olympic etc. give the opportunity to athletes of different countries to compete internationally.What to add more, when people from different countries meet at one place, they share ideas, thoughts and cultures which can help to develop global relations and tolerance to accept individual identity of others.
All in all, many international events increase the sense of patriotism among the citizens where they cheer their athletes to win in interest of nation's pride. It helps to release their emotions in harmless manner. So, in my view this kind of events are necessary for international relation development and ease.
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Hi reader,
Hi reader,
As per IELTS guideline , we have to write 250 words in essay writing. In this essay I have followed the instruction where e-graders has mentioned to add more content. Kindly guide on this. Also, give guidelines if I need to add more discourse in mentioned essay.
More suggestions for improvement will be appreciated.
Thanks and regards
Bhumika
There is a hidden rule for
There is a hidden rule for the number of words: the more, the better.
Read a real story by a testbig user why more content:
http://www.testbig.com/ielts-essays/some-people-prefer-spend-their-live…
Around 300-350 words are enough.
Discourse marks are not the issues, because of less content in this essay.
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better to have 5 paragraphs like you did before, try this pattern:
paragraph 1: introduction. Your ideas/opinions here.
paragraph 2: Admittedly, there are some advantages of side A. First, ... Second, ...
paragraph 3: However, still I support side B. reason 1 + why reason 1 + example for reason 1 + a small conclusion for reason 1.
paragraph 4: In addition, reason 2 + why reason 2 + example for reason 2+ a small conclusion for reason 2.
paragraph 5: conclusion.
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Essay evaluation report
Sports event provide a platform
Sport events provide a platform
Sentence: On this platforms countries can display skills and strength possessed by their youth which is the true treasure of any country.,
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to this and platforms
flaws:
No. of Words: 258 350 // More content wanted. Need one more paragraph.
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 258 350
No. of Characters: 1346 1500
No. of Different Words: 160 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.008 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.217 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.797 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 99 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 78 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.846 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.403 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.154 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.313 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.558 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.056 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 99, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[3]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...ople together. It teaches people how to loose with grace and how to win with modesty....
^^^^^
Line 3, column 236, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...h other in positive harmless manner. On this platforms countries can display skills ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 372, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: What
...nt countries to compete internationally.What to add more, when people from different...
^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['furthermore', 'if', 'so', 'kind of', 'in my view']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.278571428571 0.247107183377 113% => OK
Verbs: 0.15 0.155533422707 96% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0857142857143 0.0946595960268 91% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0285714285714 0.0501214627716 57% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0428571428571 0.0437548338989 98% => OK
Prepositions: 0.121428571429 0.122226691241 99% => OK
Participles: 0.025 0.0403226058552 62% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.93014969345 2.80594681477 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0392857142857 0.0326793684256 120% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0714285714286 0.0861772015684 83% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0214285714286 0.021408717616 100% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0321428571429 0.011925033212 270% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1639.0 1933.35771543 85% => OK
No of words: 257.0 316.048096192 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.37743190661 6.12580529183 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20517956788 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.396887159533 0.374742101984 106% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.315175097276 0.28420135186 111% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.241245136187 0.203846283523 118% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.151750972763 0.137316102897 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93014969345 2.80594681477 104% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.037074148 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.607003891051 0.56093040696 108% => OK
Word variations: 64.4154105732 60.7387585426 106% => OK
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0891783567 81% => OK
Sentence length: 19.7692307692 20.7743622355 95% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.9717235731 49.517814964 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.076923077 127.492653851 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7692307692 20.7743622355 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.384615384615 0.814263465372 47% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.99599198397 75% => OK
Readability: 51.2867404969 49.1944974215 104% => OK
Elegance: 1.91935483871 1.69124875643 113% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3535152597 0.332605444948 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.097995961177 0.102741220458 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0474168368401 0.0668466124924 71% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.504188447389 0.534860350844 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.128861997232 0.148594505496 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144370390905 0.134430193775 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118844693244 0.0742795772207 160% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.267174816802 0.324371583561 82% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0562820650055 0.0638462369009 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244262920209 0.228012699653 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115158475874 0.058150111329 198% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.68436873747 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.41683366733 29% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 5.90881763527 118% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.5751503006 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 1.9629258517 51% => OK
Total topic words: 8.0 10.4468937876 77% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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