Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society , especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role model are a much more powerful influence on children's behavior.
According to the passage some people believe that increasing violence in the media is cause of increasing violence in our society at some extend it is true as it spreads the message of violence happening in our society in which some people might follow it or others might be aware about it;
further it claims especially among children as children action are based on their observations.
While others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more power influence on children's behavior; I strongly agree with the second claim as children spent more time with their peer groups and parental role models other than watching increasing violence in the media.
Since birth even when when our conscious mind is not fully developed , as a baby and further as years passes being children we learn according to surrounding,our attitude changes according to positions we were in and based on past experience.For example; Recently survey held in India,which argues with the lack of education to children's in small town as their parents cannot afford educations fees or lack of facilities by which due to illiteracy some choose violence while others starts working in their childhood which is indirectly effected due to the poor parental role models.
I completely agree with the second claim as children's behavior is mostly influenced by the surrounding in which in what manner and with whom he spent his time in day to day activities.If children's peer group is under bad influence then it takes less time to get influence under bad peer groups other than good as children are not aware about the consequences in future , they just to be happen in current and surrounding situation and if proper parental is not present then it becomes very difficult for children's to choose violence instead of proper education.For example in Syria,due to current war and many other violence activities between citizens of syria , government and third party also known as Islamic State ;children's are forced to choose violence as they are not aware about the proper lifestyle in society nor do they follow increasing violence in media.They are just part of it due to the peers group in there surrounding due to the frequently occuring violence internally in Syria which is very bad and powerful influence on children's behavior as it sets their mind in wrong direction and can be difficult to gain right conscious.
Thus i conclude by agreeing with the second claim that children's peer group and parental role models are a much more powerful influence on children's behavior as it widely effects other than increasing violence in the media in which some children's are not even aware about the increasing violence in the media.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: extent
...reasing violence in our society at some extend it is true as it spreads the message of...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'third', 'thus', 'while', 'for example', 'it is true']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.25 0.240241500013 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.167372881356 0.157235817809 106% => OK
Adjectives: 0.108050847458 0.0880659088768 123% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0741525423729 0.0497285424764 149% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0593220338983 0.0444667217837 133% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.161016949153 0.12292977631 131% => OK
Participles: 0.0550847457627 0.0406280797675 136% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.69814922375 2.79330140395 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0317796610169 0.030933414821 103% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0529661016949 0.0997080785238 53% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00847457627119 0.0249443105267 34% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0233050847458 0.0148568991511 157% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2736.0 2732.02544248 100% => OK
No of words: 456.0 452.878318584 101% => OK
Chars per words: 6.0 6.0361032391 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.58838876751 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.350877192982 0.366273622748 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.265350877193 0.280924506359 94% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.214912280702 0.200843997647 107% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.133771929825 0.132149295362 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69814922375 2.79330140395 97% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 219.290929204 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.43201754386 0.48968727796 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 47.6584221301 55.4138127331 86% => OK
How many sentences: 5.0 20.6194690265 24% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 91.2 23.380412469 390% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 317.581233702 59.4972553346 534% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 547.2 141.124799967 388% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 91.2 23.380412469 390% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.0 0.674092028746 297% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.21349557522 326% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 117.735087719 51.4728631049 229% => OK
Elegance: 1.54929577465 1.64882698954 94% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.466176188147 0.391690518653 119% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.294805527856 0.123202303941 239% => Sentence is so close to another sentence.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.116394072502 0.077325440228 151% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 1.0 0.547984918172 182% => Sentence paragraph similarity is high.
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 3.17272656286e-16 0.149214159877 0% => Sentences are similar to each other in a paragraph.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.346567668819 0.161403998019 215% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100356451315 0.0892212321368 112% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.255473197383 0.385218514788 66% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.166673720514 0.0692045440612 241% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.311230690681 0.275328986314 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0948796728368 0.0653680567796 145% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 10.4325221239 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.30420353982 94% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88274336283 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 0.0 7.22455752212 0% => More positive topic words wanted.
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.66592920354 136% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.70907079646 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 5.0 13.5995575221 37% => More topic words wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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