Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past.
Nowadays, no one can deny the importance of happiness in the life. Some people may hold the opinion that people have less happiness than the past because changing the world is too fast. But others have a negative attitude. As far as I am concerned, obviously, today we have more ways to experience happiness rather than the past. My reasons and samples listed below will demonstrate my point according to the most common viewpoints.
First let us look at the amusement that we have today. Unlike the past that people had a fewer number of entertainments, today we can go to the modern cinemas, exciting parks, many resturants and watching 3d films. By way of illustration, my father told me one day about his hobbies during the childhood which was only palying with other children in the yard and they did not have any kind of amusement during the night time. On the other hand, I have many option to have more happiness if I become boring.
There is also a more subtle point we must consider. Thanks to many discoveries people have more facilities during their life which bring more satisfication for them such as faster transportation or cooking easier foods. Taking six decades ago for example, there are not suitable airplanes and trains.So, if people had to go every where, they must spent too much time. Needless to say, these covienient means provide more happiness among peolpe nowadays.
Finally, I cannot oversee the fact that the healthy life in the world is changing so quickly too. It goes without saying that, people are healtheir now and helthy condition is good index for researchers to prove that people who lived in the past had lower satification. To shed more light on the issue, according to the result of the study done in Tehran University, today happiness index is five time better than 40 years ago.
Drawing upon the reasons, although there are always some exceptions which are excluded from the general rule, I do agree thet the people have more happiness and satisfication with their lives than people were in the past.
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Essay evaluation report
changing the world is too fast.
the world is changing too fast.
my father told me one day about his hobbies during the childhood which was only palying with other children
my father told me one day about his hobbies which were only playing with other children during the childhood
I have many option
I have many options
Sentence: Unlike the past that people had a fewer number of entertainments, today we can go to the modern cinemas, exciting parks, many resturants and watching 3d films.
Error: resturants Suggestion: restaurants
Sentence: By way of illustration, my father told me one day about his hobbies during the childhood which was only palying with other children in the yard and they did not have any kind of amusement during the night time.
Error: palying Suggestion: paying
Sentence: Thanks to many discoveries people have more facilities during their life which bring more satisfication for them such as faster transportation or cooking easier foods.
Error: satisfication Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Needless to say, these covienient means provide more happiness among peolpe nowadays.
Error: peolpe Suggestion: people
Error: covienient Suggestion: convenient
Sentence: It goes without saying that, people are healtheir now and helthy condition is good index for researchers to prove that people who lived in the past had lower satification.
Error: satification Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: healtheir Suggestion: healthier
Error: helthy Suggestion: healthy
Sentence: Drawing upon the reasons, although there are always some exceptions which are excluded from the general rule, I do agree thet the people have more happiness and satisfication with their lives than people were in the past.
Error: thet Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: satisfication Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 354 350
No. of Characters: 1655 1500
No. of Different Words: 210 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.338 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.675 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.455 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 104 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 67 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.824 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.288 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.529 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.336 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.552 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.108 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 453, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun option seems to be countable; consider using: 'many options'.
Suggestion: many options
...e night time. On the other hand, I have many option to have more happiness if I become bori...
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Line 5, column 301, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...e are not suitable airplanes and trains.So, if people had to go every where, they ...
^^
Line 5, column 325, Rule ID: EVERY_WHERE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'everywhere'?
Suggestion: everywhere
...anes and trains.So, if people had to go every where, they must spent too much time. Needles...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'so', 'for example', 'kind of', 'such as', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.246786632391 0.229887763892 107% => OK
Verbs: 0.164524421594 0.158761421928 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0848329048843 0.0866891130778 98% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0565552699229 0.046263068375 122% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0539845758355 0.0685040099705 79% => OK
Prepositions: 0.118251928021 0.118717715034 100% => OK
Participles: 0.0411311053985 0.0351676179071 117% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.55172399209 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.025706940874 0.0309702414327 83% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0874035989717 0.0887237588012 99% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0179948586118 0.0209618222197 86% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.012853470437 0.0139019557991 92% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2057.0 2387.08602151 86% => OK
No of words: 353.0 408.028673835 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.82719546742 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48200974243 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.311614730878 0.338922669872 92% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.195467422096 0.251872472559 78% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.150141643059 0.174417080927 86% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.110481586402 0.112833075102 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55172399209 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597733711048 0.524397521467 114% => OK
Word variations: 69.7688984493 59.2087087015 118% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 20.7647058824 20.5533526081 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2856726591 48.84282405 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.0 120.699889404 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7647058824 20.5533526081 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.705882352941 0.644075263715 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 40.311448092 45.7405998639 88% => OK
Elegance: 1.47663551402 1.45489161554 101% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346277830523 0.300154397459 115% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.072952379479 0.103427244359 71% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0489569539676 0.0752933317313 65% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.539185061516 0.497263757937 108% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.167637806924 0.151897553556 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118082987774 0.114077575197 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108432059458 0.0781384742642 139% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.267711115667 0.336927656856 79% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.118871670032 0.067059652881 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223227638819 0.210909579961 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0973820594782 0.0618886996521 157% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.4623655914 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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