I disagree with the idea that at universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. There are several reasons why i disagree with that idea.
First, the main purpose for a student to go to universities and college is to receive high standard education.The student is there to learn how to be a professional person in a specific field, at the university or the college the student should focus all his/her time and energy to get as much benefits as he/she can from the education resources. That is the reason why most of the financial support should go towards the classes, libraries and labs.
Second, There are other places that focus on sports and social activities like a recreation centre or a gym, where students can go there on their free time. Exercise and social activities are very important to give students energy and help them have a good quality of life but these sport places already spend most of their financial support on sports and activities. That is why i support spending the universities and collages' financial support toward education.
Third, It might be distractive for the students to have too many social activities in the university. Some student may prefer to attend a specific activity or sport over attending a class or going to the library to study.
For conclusion, I think most of the financial support in universities and colleges should go toward education, and the recreation centres' financial support should go toward sports and social activities.
- TPO-07 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is more important for students to understand ideas and concepts than it is for them to learn facts.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
- TPO-16 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 83
- TPO-15 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans 60
- TPO-18 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 67
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Third, It might be distractive for the students to have too many social activities in the university.
Error: distractive Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Words: 266 350
No. of Different Words: 124 200
We are expecting:
No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
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Try this pattern to get more content:
Para 1: introduction. my choice: A or B. agree or disagree. (suppose we support side A)
Para 2: First, reason 1 (1 sentence) + why reason 1(some arguments. 2-3 sentences) + examples for reason 1 (around 1 sentences) + small conclusions (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1, 1-2 sentences).
Para 3: Second, reason 2, blabla... do the same thing as First
Para 4: Admittedly, there are some advantages of side B. first,....second...However, there is no causation/relation... Still I support side A, ...first,....second...
Para 5: Conclusion.
An simple example (Eating at home or restaurant) for paragraph 2:
Para 2: First, reason 1 (1 sentence: Eating at home can save money) + why reason 1(some arguments. 2-3 sentences: I can prepare cheaper food from food market; I don't need to drive or take a bus to reach the restaurant; I don't need to pay tips...) + examples for reason 1 (around 1 sentence: for example, a sandwich can cost me $10 at restaurant, but it only cost me $5 at home.) + small conclusions (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1, 1-2 sentences: with the money I saved, I can buy a good book to read; I can use the money for a trip...).
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 19 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 266 350
No. of Characters: 1293 1500
No. of Different Words: 124 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.039 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.861 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.674 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 100 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 73 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.513 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.431 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.715 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.112 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 212, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... support. There are several reasons why i disagree with that idea. First, th...
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Line 3, column 112, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...e is to receive high standard education.The student is there to learn how to be a p...
^^^
Line 3, column 291, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...s all his/her time and energy to get as much benefits as he/she can from the educati...
^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'third', 'i think']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.269503546099 0.229887763892 117% => OK
Verbs: 0.131205673759 0.158761421928 83% => OK
Adjectives: 0.113475177305 0.0866891130778 131% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0283687943262 0.046263068375 61% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0212765957447 0.0685040099705 31% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0921985815603 0.118717715034 78% => OK
Participles: 0.0106382978723 0.0351676179071 30% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.77413364683 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0390070921986 0.0309702414327 126% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.102836879433 0.0887237588012 116% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.031914893617 0.0209618222197 152% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0248226950355 0.0139019557991 179% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1599.0 2387.08602151 67% => OK
No of words: 263.0 408.028673835 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.07984790875 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.48200974243 90% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.403041825095 0.338922669872 119% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.285171102662 0.251872472559 113% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.190114068441 0.174417080927 109% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.12927756654 0.112833075102 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77413364683 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 212.727598566 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48288973384 0.524397521467 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 45.38060084 59.2087087015 77% => OK
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6684587814 48% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 26.3 20.5533526081 128% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.1163699875 48.84282405 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.9 120.699889404 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3 20.5533526081 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.8 0.644075263715 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 54.8171102662 45.7405998639 120% => OK
Elegance: 2.05882352941 1.45489161554 142% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.459743436321 0.300154397459 153% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.132391036663 0.103427244359 128% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0961957496618 0.0752933317313 128% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.703964061412 0.497263757937 142% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.186036503681 0.151897553556 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.230409695025 0.114077575197 202% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.188545564128 0.0781384742642 241% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.180599532979 0.336927656856 54% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0614510516776 0.067059652881 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.315988485554 0.210909579961 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.171767189838 0.0618886996521 278% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8870967742 59% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 7.0 8.42114695341 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 10.0 13.6433691756 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.