Robert Redford: Protect Our Wild Horses
In response to the limited, uneven status quo of wild horses nowadays, Redford argues that the congress should do more to protect the Americans’ old friends, the ”useless” wild horses in his article ” Protect Our Wild Horses”. The author builds his convincing statement by making use of subtle personal anecdote, striking contrast, raw statistics, and appeal to pathos. After reading this cogent argument, most of his readers, me included, will find ourselves nodding along with the author’s own claim and not just because he is right.
Redford starts his argument off by employing his subtle personal experiences with his everyday friends, wild horses. Redford points out directly the reason for he writing this article. It is the “shared”, “personal”, and “professional” encounters that trigger him to stand up for the withering, trembling wild horses. Robert challenges his audience to remind of a time when wild horses are treated as precise gifts, when people have to count on wild horses to survive. To stir up his readers’ emotions, Redford upgrades the importance of preserving the wild horses to a whole new level-the protection of the America’s principles. Moreover, Redford unveils the heartbreaking, rigid fact that it is the “varied” and “subjective” interpretation of laws that leads to the current situation. By doing so, Redford gives his parties of readers a whole picture of this issue and sets up an efficient lead-in to the rest of the passage.
Redford moves his argument by utilizing the striking, potent contrast and accurate, credible statistics. Redford unravels this heartfelt fact that the total acres of our public lands is 245 million, with 155 million acres used to graze livestock; however, merely 26.9 million acres are permitted to wild horses. What a shame! In addition, the population of wild horses varies between 32,000 and 50,000; rather, that of livestock grazing allocation is in the millions! By utilizing the powerful contrast, Redford reveals the “uneven playing filed” on the land management and population. Redford urges the readers to realize that wild horses are at stake and it is time to do something more for our old friends. To give his audience the hope to enhance this situation, Redford assures his readers that wild horses can be no harm to our grazing land because technology today can redress the negative impacted by wild horses, which has been ignored by decades of inaccurate, biased propaganda. By doing so, Redford lends support to his own claim and draw the readers’ attention to the heart of this issue.
To build a bridge to the deep mind of his readers, Redford, like any other good author, takes use of appeal to self-interest. Redford mentions the irrefutable fact that though less than 3% of America’s beef is produced domestically, taxpayers, most of his readers, him included, have to pay more 123 million dollars per year for the subsidized grazing program! Redford dares his readers to think that if we can spend so much on “fruitless” agricultural communities, why cannot we give a helping hand to our old friends? why cannot we do something to save the fading western spirit? why cannot we just treat the horses fairly?
In conclusion, writhing as a reaction to the endangered wild horses, Redford argues that people should do more to help the horses. Redford builds this intellectual essay by employing subtle personal episodes, compelling contrast, appeal to self-interest, and raw, credible statistics.
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Discourse Markers used:
['however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'in addition', 'in conclusion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.265129682997 0.207487326364 128% => OK
Verbs: 0.13976945245 0.178051882461 78% => OK
Adjectives: 0.100864553314 0.0710882070711 142% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0273775216138 0.054192469471 51% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0489913544669 0.0788294359526 62% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0965417867435 0.113153031695 85% => OK
Participles: 0.0403458213256 0.0405287373684 100% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.75482482729 2.57436861015 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0432276657061 0.0330409994468 131% => OK
Particles: 0.00576368876081 0.00395508247954 146% => OK
Determiners: 0.0778097982709 0.0846798446462 92% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0129682997118 0.0200971341121 65% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0115273775216 0.0186200286747 62% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3611.0 2400.7244898 150% => OK
No of words: 585.0 420.979591837 139% => OK
Chars per words: 6.17264957265 5.69806673023 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9180050066 4.50529295783 109% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.410256410256 0.312954788886 131% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.312820512821 0.228378107189 137% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.193162393162 0.149657492316 129% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.126495726496 0.0961199562267 132% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75482482729 2.57436861015 107% => OK
Unique words: 292.0 218.897959184 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.499145299145 0.525349112488 95% => OK
Word variations: 61.5563687328 59.7531382909 103% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 21.1326530612 118% => OK
Sentence length: 23.4 22.5233548778 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.1936873767 57.2499281806 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.44 128.169777245 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4 22.5233548778 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.24 0.512563296488 47% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.81632653061 104% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 8.19387755102 171% => OK
Readability: 54.6820512821 45.3611655967 121% => OK
Elegance: 1.86 1.2154614572 153% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225566517601 0.261585535914 86% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.106018926818 0.11056464219 96% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0798710760213 0.0803011150293 99% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.504788307399 0.512389995828 99% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.162031471662 0.145688229778 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0884895074742 0.101868156861 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0787045111835 0.0747395488652 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.499356163398 0.281641303011 177% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.152011884284 0.0785803847776 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163609251955 0.175808837392 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0451713503058 0.0673036504717 67% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.387755102 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.19387755102 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.55102040816 44% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 7.71428571429 156% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 4.44897959184 22% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.67346938776 37% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 14.8367346939 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.