"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The progress of every society depends on how efficient its leaders are. A good leader can help the society reach new heights. Hence, to ensure a successful future, it is paramount for every society to nurture its youngsters and mould them into good leaders. However, I do not completely agree with the claim that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in various fields like government, industry, etc. is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation and not competition.
One of the best features of competition is that a healthy competition between any two individuals always brings the best out of them. It motivate them to achieve something which they never thought they would be capable of. With a goal of surpassing everyone always on their mind, they put in extra efforts which improves their ability substantially. The best example for this is the Jamaican sprinter, Yohan Blake. Blake has always said in interviews that his biggest competitor, the great sprinter Usain Bolt, is his biggest motivation. He says that it is the healthy competition he has with Bolt that motivates him to work harder. Doing so, he claims, has improved him way more than he imagined.
However, care must be taken that this competition is always a healthy one. A competition with jealousy and hatred as its ingredients can have some really detrimental effects. Also these youngsters must also be taught a way to cooperate and work as a team.
In conclusion, if the society instills a sense of healthy competition in its youngsters, and those youngsters then cooperate and work together, it will go a long way in helping both, the individuals and the society, achieve greater heights.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'really', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'in conclusion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.21875 0.240241500013 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.153125 0.157235817809 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.075 0.0880659088768 85% => OK
Adverbs: 0.05625 0.0497285424764 113% => OK
Pronouns: 0.084375 0.0444667217837 190% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.121875 0.12292977631 99% => OK
Participles: 0.01875 0.0406280797675 46% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.80294910624 2.79330140395 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.01875 0.030933414821 61% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.10625 0.0997080785238 107% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.01875 0.0249443105267 75% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0125 0.0148568991511 84% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1707.0 2732.02544248 62% => OK
No of words: 287.0 452.878318584 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.94773519164 6.0361032391 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.58838876751 90% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.337979094077 0.366273622748 92% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.289198606272 0.280924506359 103% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.188153310105 0.200843997647 94% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.128919860627 0.132149295362 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80294910624 2.79330140395 100% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 219.290929204 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560975609756 0.48968727796 115% => OK
Word variations: 58.1911902622 55.4138127331 105% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6194690265 78% => OK
Sentence length: 17.9375 23.380412469 77% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2138998998 59.4972553346 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.6875 141.124799967 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9375 23.380412469 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5625 0.674092028746 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.21349557522 115% => OK
Readability: 46.8573606272 51.4728631049 91% => OK
Elegance: 1.22340425532 1.64882698954 74% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.395932991829 0.391690518653 101% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.135601386246 0.123202303941 110% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0899761007489 0.077325440228 116% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.474662010993 0.547984918172 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.170348059344 0.149214159877 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135068904361 0.161403998019 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107757104195 0.0892212321368 121% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.188561872095 0.385218514788 49% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0484404711675 0.0692045440612 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241420258308 0.275328986314 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.134061456507 0.0653680567796 205% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.4325221239 125% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.30420353982 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88274336283 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 7.22455752212 97% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 3.66592920354 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 9.0 13.5995575221 66% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.