When it comes to children, most of the parents would want to give anything they have to their children. One of the things that parents would give to their own children is money, specially if these parents are wealthy. It is essential to support our children financially but at the same time some parents think that they have to be cautious with giving money to their children as this might affect them negatively on the long run. This issue arouse controversy between different parents depending on their own financial status and their point of view in raising their children. I agree that in order to become financially responsible adults, children need to learn to manage their own money at young age, for the following concerns.
First of all, It will make them aware of the money value. If the children keep spending their parents money without a limit, they might not be able to set a limit for themselves when they grow up. A common example is credit cards, a lot of children specially teenagers open their own credit cards and keep buying stuff and spending money with no limit which they can not pay back and if their parents did not pay it, they will go in debt. That is why parents should set a limit of spending money for their children at young age, this way they learn how to be responsible in the future and how to stay with in the limit that they can pay off.
In addition, I think parents should teach their children about saving. If they learn how to save from a small amount of money which they get from their parents, on the long run they will know how to save on a bigger scale. When they become responsible adults they will be able to save for their house, for emergencies or for their vacation which is more useful than spending all the money on resturants and buying unnecessary stuff.
Finally, Another thing that can help a child to become a financially responsible adult is working at high school or college age as long as it will not affect his studying life. Working for a day or two a week help them to understand how their parents bring the money and how hard it is, this way they will appreciate the money and be careful about spending it.
Also it will be encouraging for them to be successful in college and be good at their prefered subject in order to get a better job.
In conclusion, Supporting children is financially is one of the most important duties for the parents, But i still agree that giving them much money without a limit will not help them to become responsible adults.
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Essay evaluation report
Supporting children is financially is one of the most important duties
Supporting children financially is one of the most important duties
flaws:
No. of Words: 458 while No. of Different Words: 185
The conclusion is off the topic:
But i still agree that giving them much money without a limit will not help them to become responsible adults.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 18 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 458 350
No. of Characters: 2025 1500
No. of Different Words: 185 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.626 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.421 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.319 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 111 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.791 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.38 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.603 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.175 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 435, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...esturants and buying unnecessary stuff. Finally, Another thing that can help a ...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...oney and be careful about spending it. Also it will be encouraging for them to be s...
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Line 8, column 133, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d subject in order to get a better job. In conclusion, Supporting children is f...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'if', 'so', 'still', 'another thing', 'i think', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.204081632653 0.229887763892 89% => OK
Verbs: 0.163265306122 0.158761421928 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0775510204082 0.0866891130778 89% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0428571428571 0.046263068375 93% => OK
Pronouns: 0.102040816327 0.0685040099705 149% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.120408163265 0.118717715034 101% => OK
Participles: 0.0285714285714 0.0351676179071 81% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.35517875229 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0428571428571 0.0309702414327 138% => OK
Particles: 0.00408163265306 0.00188951952338 216% => OK
Determiners: 0.0755102040816 0.0887237588012 85% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.034693877551 0.0209618222197 166% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.030612244898 0.0139019557991 220% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2537.0 2387.08602151 106% => OK
No of words: 458.0 408.028673835 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53930131004 5.86048508987 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.48200974243 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.257641921397 0.338922669872 76% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.183406113537 0.251872472559 73% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.126637554585 0.174417080927 73% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0764192139738 0.112833075102 68% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35517875229 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.412663755459 0.524397521467 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 45.4051189737 59.2087087015 77% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6684587814 77% => OK
Sentence length: 28.625 20.5533526081 139% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4362469471 48.84282405 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.5625 120.699889404 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.625 20.5533526081 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.75 0.644075263715 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.5376344086 132% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 46.9656113537 45.7405998639 103% => OK
Elegance: 1.14569536424 1.45489161554 79% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36516660197 0.300154397459 122% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.15562968919 0.103427244359 150% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0893937162383 0.0752933317313 119% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.659534232875 0.497263757937 133% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.191582963621 0.151897553556 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.179057217174 0.114077575197 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114279043048 0.0781384742642 146% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.307865845828 0.336927656856 91% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.131155701109 0.067059652881 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228768968653 0.210909579961 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0842904550729 0.0618886996521 136% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.86379928315 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 13.0 8.42114695341 154% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.4623655914 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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