Some people think that television advertising is beneficial and that it makes their life easier which i agree with. But I also agree with the opinion that television advertising directed towards young children should not be allowed for the following reasons.
First, children at age from 2 to 5 years are usually attracted to the television and the cartoon shows, but at the same time they can not make an informed decision. When kids see candy or toys advertisements they get attracted to them and keep looking for these candies or toys even though it might be harmful for their age. For example, when my brother was 3 years old he saw an advertisement for a hard candy so he went to the kitchen and grab one of those hard candies and put it in his ears which might have caused major ear problems.
Second, Some children products such as medicines and vitamins should not be allowed to be advertised as this increase the chance of people buying these products just because they had a good marketing. Not all children are the same, some products may work for some children and some other products may work for the rest of the children. The child health has a big impact on that person's health when he or she grows up, that is why medicines and vitamins should only be given under medical supervision not only by good advertising.
Third, As a pharmacist, I have seen many mothers come to the pharmacy and buy some vitamins or medicines for their children without going to the doctor. Television advertisement made them lazy to go see the doctor to get the right information which can be dangerous on the child as they can get an over dose or under dose or even the wrong medication.
In conclusion, When we weight the benefits against the risks of television advertising directed toward children we can see that It has more risks than benefits for the child That is why I agree that this should not be allowed specially for critical products like medicine and vitamins.
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Essay evaluation report
Some people think that television advertising is beneficial and that it makes their life easier which i agree with
Some people think that television advertising is beneficial and it makes their life easier which i agree with
flaws:
1. Avg. Sentence Length: 31.727 21.0 //some sentences are too long.
2. be careful to examples. They may be duplicated to the arguments. for example:
'When kids see candy or toys advertisements they get attracted to them and keep looking for these candies or toys even though it might be harmful for their age.'
'For example, when my brother was 3 years old he saw an advertisement for a hard candy so he went to the kitchen and grab one of those hard candies and put it in his ears which might have caused major ear problems.'
They talk about the same thing.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 349 350
No. of Characters: 1598 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.322 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.579 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.502 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 96 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 77 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.727 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.335 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.392 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.705 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.187 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 104, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...d that it makes their life easier which i agree with. But I also agree with the o...
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Line 5, column 380, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...e child health has a big impact on that persons health when he or she grows up, that is...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'third', 'for example', 'in conclusion', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.238482384824 0.229887763892 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.165311653117 0.158761421928 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.059620596206 0.0866891130778 69% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0379403794038 0.046263068375 82% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0650406504065 0.0685040099705 95% => OK
Prepositions: 0.121951219512 0.118717715034 103% => OK
Participles: 0.0325203252033 0.0351676179071 92% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.55991495721 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0243902439024 0.0309702414327 79% => OK
Particles: 0.00271002710027 0.00188951952338 143% => OK
Determiners: 0.111111111111 0.0887237588012 125% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0325203252033 0.0209618222197 155% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0271002710027 0.0139019557991 195% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1989.0 2387.08602151 83% => OK
No of words: 349.0 408.028673835 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.69914040115 5.86048508987 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48200974243 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.283667621777 0.338922669872 84% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.226361031519 0.251872472559 90% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.166189111748 0.174417080927 95% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0916905444126 0.112833075102 81% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55991495721 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507163323782 0.524397521467 97% => OK
Word variations: 53.3685618708 59.2087087015 90% => OK
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6684587814 53% => OK
Sentence length: 31.7272727273 20.5533526081 154% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.9111610694 48.84282405 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 180.818181818 120.699889404 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.7272727273 20.5533526081 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.09090909091 0.644075263715 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 54.3633758791 45.7405998639 119% => OK
Elegance: 1.46464646465 1.45489161554 101% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293809015012 0.300154397459 98% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.145434328172 0.103427244359 141% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0700796427643 0.0752933317313 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.680947886559 0.497263757937 137% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.133460417697 0.151897553556 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147465853683 0.114077575197 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.081781360937 0.0781384742642 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.225895993008 0.336927656856 67% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0542345528578 0.067059652881 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196790681608 0.210909579961 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0552399167236 0.0618886996521 89% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8870967742 50% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 8.42114695341 71% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 13.6433691756 81% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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