Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by koku on Sun, 12/25/2016 - 07:33

Students are the most valuable asset to any country because they being the youth represent their respective countries in the near upcoming years. Though there is no age age for learning and hence for becoming a student but, still the age of students generally fall between 4-18. Since the child has to be a student in order to learn, grow and become part of society as well as country's economy, they need to learn and grow in a good environment followed by good influential people. It is said that parents and schools are the best teachers one can ever have but, the role of friends in this century cannot be ignored at all. Thereby, throwing some light in the paragraphs mentioned below.

Students spend very less time with teachers, which prevents them from creating a good understanding between teacher and a student these days. On the contrary, they spend more time with their friends at school, tuitions, art classes, dance classes, etc. For instance, students like being in a company which falls under the same age group, interests, understanding and they spending more time with their collegues, friends in the society influences them more than what a teacher can. As they get to share a lot more within the same age age group rather than the older age group which follows teachers and parents. Furthermore, students spend less time at home because of their various learning classes, activity clubs and parents busy schedule. Thus making them more comfortable and addicted to their friends who listen them more often, sharing their day-to-day activities keeps them more close, influential and comfortable within that company.

Moreover, teachers these days do not consider teaching as their responsibility instead they take it as job for earning money and career growth for their own benefits. They do not take interest in being friendly with the students so as to know them, inspire them for doing good things, which ultimately draw students attention from main part of learning and directing it towards friends who understand them better. In turn leading to a great bond between themselves, something more than a job as an emotional attachment. But, this could have serious consequences sometimes as the company students are dealing with might not be good always and may lead them into wrong hands sometimes.

Summing up on the entire scenario, we can see that students spend more time with friends than their teachers which is not good always. And, requires teachers as well as parents to focus on their key responsibilities in order to give them these students a succesful career and a peaceful life worth living.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 166, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: age
...near upcoming years. Though there is no age age for learning and hence for becoming a s...
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Line 3, column 531, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: age
...get to share a lot more within the same age age group rather than the older age group w...
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Line 5, column 230, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...est in being friendly with the students so as to know them, inspire them for doing good ...
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Line 5, column 536, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...an emotional attachment. But, this could have serious consequences sometimes as t...
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Line 7, column 128, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[3]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
...s than their teachers which is not good always. And, requires teachers as well as pare...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, hence, if, may, moreover, so, still, thus, well, as to, for instance, as well as, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2196.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01369863014 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55885864264 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518264840183 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 639.9 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6275629758 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.176470588 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7647058824 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76470588235 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241824011339 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0891703081747 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0536108391854 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16678855676 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0555941093919 0.0645574589148 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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