Some people think that famous people can help international aid organizations to draw attention to important problems. Others believe that the celebrities can make the problems seem less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Getting puplic concentration is a crucial matter in almost global support institutions. Paticipation of superstars, meanwhile, is a usefull tool of these associations to generate social consideration according to some prospective’s individuals, other people argue that this attendence could even bring counter-rewarding outcome. My essay will elaborate on the validity of both sides.
On the one hand, there is large-scale landing of a numerous people to join aid events which is result of appearance of their idols. Stars such as Michanel Jackson, should be loved by milions of people around the world therefore obserating idols in real life is a dream of almost fans who could spend time to take part in all their superstars’s occasions. It is could be true ,however, instead of attraction whole society as expection of assistant organisations, the number of interest people merly limits in famous people’s fan range .Moreover, the project could be destroyed due to disgrace of anti-fans who tend to boycott almost pulic activities of superstar.
On the other hand, the support of celebrities would be counter-benificial to some extent. While societies should pay a huge fee for invating luminary, people join event usually focusing on their superstar which lead to non-attention to aid occasion’s purpose. The method could make the problem seem more terriable when pulic figer had scandals in the past and these malicious gossips are the culprit of getting pulic indignant with apparance of idol , even society would not support the union as before. Selena Gomez, for example, is a famous singer in America. Her love trouble is a reason which decreases the public subscription for charitable project of Dammy coroparation when the company signs a contract about representative image with the singer.
In conclusion, it seems that the assistance of luminary contains more disadvantage points than advandtage one in term of paying communal attention
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, even so, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1675.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47385620915 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28171652319 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.643790849673 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.2528556086 49.4020404114 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.583333333 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.01903807615 299% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142480005728 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0491260518568 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0287131818162 0.0667982634062 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0779225725768 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0203457139164 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.45 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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