Nowadays, younger generation spends their time with other tasks rather than helping their communities. I agree with the above statement because of too much attention from child's parents and also the advancement of technology.
First, parents encourage to pay attention to their child behavior in a modern world and make their children life much easier than the older generation. Sometimes this could bring negative results when children became an adult. Since their parents were completely responsible for their children. Therefore, they have failed to help others due to lack of responsibility in the different situation in their community. For instance, when parents do not ask his teenager to work during summer because they believe the part-time job makes him tired. By this decision, the child does not learn how to accompany with others.
Second, young people spend several hours of a day in social media and play digital games due to the advancement of technology. This is another reason which they focus their time on the Internet and connecting with other in this way. But the older generation had helped their community by communication and participating in social work. For instance, during the summer they helped their parents in harvesting and cultivating the goods and distributed them in the grocery shops. I think this strong connection between younger generation with their society could not happen in this decade because of improvement of technology.
In conclusion, the new generation has less responsibility to their communities due to parent role in raising their child and enhancement of technology.
- TPO-24 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples 70
- TPO-23 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct.Use specific reasons an 60
- TPO-25 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 66
- TPO-21 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans 66
- TPO-10 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 26, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'paying'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: paying
...echnology. First, parents encourage to pay attention to their child behavior in a ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, for instance, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 15.1003584229 13% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1375.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 256.0 407.700716846 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37109375 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82986986488 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578125 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 416.7 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.7787358111 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 98.2142857143 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2857142857 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78571428571 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166140250508 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0628851161979 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043161093845 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112993124145 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0534287313674 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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