Some people like to record their life by sharing pictures and other information on social-networking sites. Others keep this information to themselves and never share it online. Which do you prefer?
Since the dawn of humanity, socializing with others has been one of the prominent needs and trends for human to be happy and tackle their problems. There is a heated controversy as to whether one should share their life events on social networks or should maintain them to themselves. A plethora of people have been inclined to the idea that sharing pictures online with others have more benefits that its drawbacks, while others believe otherwise.I, myself, subscribe to the former group for quite a few reasons. Two of substantial ones of which are elaborated upon hereunder.
One of the reasons come to my mind at first has to do with the fact that by sharing pictures on social networking websites people can reunite with their childhood friends and update them about their current social life. Also social networking sites gives an opportunity for people to extend their friendship and make new friends with a wide spectrum of notions, cultures, races, believes, to name but a few. For instance, I got familiar with my American friend, Sam, in Facebook. Sam shared all his pictures taken in natural places from all over the world and I found out that I have a lot in common with Sam. My friendship with Sam has been a long lasting one.
Another equally remarkable point in corroborating my stance for which I have to elaborate is that the world confronts economic crisis, the recession, in which obtaining and maintain a job is getting increasingly difficult due to the high-inflation and rising unemployment in communities. Sharing picture and other information on social-neworking such as Facebook, Instagram, Imo, to name but a few, give people the chance to find better professions and even do successful businesses. People by updating their profiles and informing others about their academic backgrounds as well as job experiences path the way for obtaining new jobs and present their interests and abilities as well as skills.
In brief, contemplating the aforementioned reasons, one soon realize that sharing pictures online with other people provides the opportunity of making new friends and commencing new professions which could not be obtained only by limiting
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 179, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...problems. There is a heated controversy as to whether one should share their life events on s...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...awbacks, while others believe otherwise.I, myself, subscribe to the former group ...
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Line 2, column 220, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...e them about their current social life. Also social networking sites gives an opport...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...h could not be obtained only by limiting
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, well, while, as to, for instance, in brief, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1826.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11484593838 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88818203403 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565826330532 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.858889693 48.9658058833 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.461538462 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4615384615 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84615384615 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287380840843 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103232204664 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0741812752433 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182064572588 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0418483506102 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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