The diagram shows the changes that habe taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Three diagrams are showing how West Park Secondary School developed at three different states of years, 1950, 1980 and 2010. The main feature from the map is that school increased in size.
Turning to detail, School in 1950 was changed to Main building in 1980, and half of the Houses in 1950 next to School gone away to both Car park and Science block, expanding the whole size of School in 1980. The premises for Farmland, which was there in 1950 replaced by Sports field in 1980. Playground which was located behind the school in 1950 remained existing in 1980.
Also at last two stages, the area of car park eas greatly increased, taking the plave of Sports field. However, sports field moved next to playground, which was almost halved in size, giving half the place to Playground in 2010
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Essay evaluation report
how West Park Secondary School developed
how West Park Secondary School was developed
The main feature from the map is that school increased in size.
The main feature from the map is that the school has increased in size.
and half of the Houses in 1950 next to School gone away
and half of the Houses in 1950 next to School has gone away
the area of car park eas greatly increased
the area of car park area is greatly increased
Sentence: Also at last two stages, the area of car park eas greatly increased, taking the plave of Sports field.
Error: eas Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: plave Suggestion: place
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2 //don't forget verbs
No. of Words: 140 200
Minimum 150 words wanted
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 9
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 7 10
No. of Words: 140 200
No. of Characters: 635 1000
No. of Different Words: 83 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.44 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.536 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.099 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 42 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 24 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 16 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 9 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.783 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.286 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.487 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.718 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.139 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...l in 1950 remained existing in 1980. Also at last two stages, the area of car par...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, second, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 660.0 965.302439024 68% => OK
No of words: 140.0 196.424390244 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71428571429 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.43979062825 3.73543355544 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.17706036589 2.65546596893 82% => OK
Unique words: 84.0 106.607317073 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 170.1 283.868780488 60% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0111303176 43.030603864 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2857142857 112.824112599 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 22.9334400587 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14285714286 5.23603664747 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198462353568 0.215688989381 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0934843525865 0.103423049105 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0687512322794 0.0843802449381 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142590553577 0.15604864568 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0756515318812 0.0819641961636 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 85.02 61.2550243902 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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