In many countries. governments spent a large amount of money on improving internet access.
Why is it happening and do you think it is the most appropriate use of government money?
It is true that in many countries, the governemts have poured their money into extending internet access. There are several reasons for such spending and in my opinion, a large amount of national budget should be allocated to other more urgent priorities.
There are two main reasons why some goverments are allocating a great deal of money to the improvement of internet access. First, the non-stop progress of the Internet gives people countless opportunities to access huge storage of information and acquire a great deal of knowledge about all aspects of life, most of which are free of charge or require a small fee. This heightens citizens’ intellect and and forms a civilzed society, leading to a more sustainable development of a country. Second, the Internet also supplies goverments wih an efficient medium for running national campaigns to raise public awareness of social issues. For instance, leaders of many countries have provided their citizens with online help and advice on some problems such as disease prevention and environmental protection .
However, I still belive that there are other priorities that goverments should take into consideration. From an educational perspective, in many remote areas in developing countries where hunger and poverty is still a common sight, a majority of youngsters do not have access to education. Therefore, more state money should be invested in constructing schools with teachers carefully trained and facilities greatly modernized to provide children who always struggle to make a living with a more effective studying environment. This will result in a more well-educated and productive workforce in rural areas, postively affecting economic expansion. From the perpestive of national security, as there has been an increase in terror attacks which pose a threat on human life, government expenditure on police and security services play a vital role in ensuring the safe of all citizens. For example, the terrorist incidents in France have led to the loss of many innocent lives.
In conclusion, while the Internet brings a lot of benefits to society, governtments should prioritise investing in education and national security in order to enable their citizens to enjoy a more decent standard of living.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, so, still, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1921.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 356.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39606741573 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97614532838 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606741573034 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.1624229436 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.214285714 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4285714286 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3571428571 7.06120827912 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175745357132 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0570352888318 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0677001671345 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102678828785 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0578870005163 0.056905535591 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.42 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 78.4519038076 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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